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Dark Usagi
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since 2000-04-10
Posts 18
Oviedo, FL, USA

0 posted 2000-04-27 06:51 PM


Breaking me in? Is this what you call it?

Thinking that once I bleed it makes other heartbreaks easier

Scars cannot stop the pain you throw at me

Even a fair white stalion cannot help but to dirty her strong beautiful pale fur when hit

How can you expect me not to feel when you hurt me so?

No matter how thick the scars when stabbed hard enough I feel bleed

So I say, the only name I can see is heartbreak


 "Pictures are so perfect...in a perfect moment until you look into their eyes and truley see the storms of their soul"-Dark Usagi

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Kurly
Junior Member
since 2000-04-21
Posts 48

1 posted 2000-04-27 07:16 PM


Great Poem..
Isis
Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
2 posted 2000-04-27 09:08 PM


Great work and style here DU!!  

 A heart and soul are not judged by how much you love, but by how much you are loved by others...
~Isis~
(Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit)



JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
3 posted 2000-04-28 03:55 PM


This is interesting the way you have written about hurt and pain and heatbreak and bleeding and hitting.  You seems so detached from it all.  It touches my emotions.   James
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