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Suicide (Part I)
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Suicide (Part I) |
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DarkEternally New Member
since 2000-02-01
Posts 3 |
Suicide (Part I) Returned home from school My eyes filled with tears I feel like such a fool I have too many fears Told mom I loved her As i made my way to my room I don't know what's in for me But I will know soon Took my pocket knife out of my drawer Cut my stereo up loud Sat down upon the floor Suicide fills my mind like a cloud I placed the knife to my arm.... I'm scared to go any further Will my death cause any harm? Knife upon my arm... murder. Pricked my finger with the tip Blood flows so smoothly Placed the blood on my lip Drank my own blood thoroughly I took out a clean peice of paper And i began to write Hope mom reads this sooner or later She will cry, she just might I told myself, it is time To take my life away My existence, not worth a dime Time for my soul to go astray Clean cut across my wrist so wide, No, thats not enough Dug the tip deep inside Down where it gets rough Cut the vein in my arm Blood flowing like a river Feel death's surrounding charm As my hands begin to shiver My once white shirt stained all red Try to get up and look Blood starts flowing around my bed Just another death added to the book Stumbling across the hall In front of the bathroom sink I can't help but fall My death is on the brink Laying on the floor drowning Sinking in my own blood Hell's gates are sounding I wouldn't go back if i could Its getting harder to breathe As i look at the wall Its all for the better, you will see My soul begins to fall Knew it was my final breath So i screamed out, "Mommy!!" She came running into the room Screaming and crying I told her I loved her and that she'd understand soon Told her to kiss me goodbye Told her the note's in my room "Mommy i love you. Now i must die." (Oxygen rushing from the lungs..... never to be filled again) |
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TanAngel Member
since 2000-02-01
Posts 168Oviedo, Florida, USA |
I'm speechless...I know I used to think about sucide all the time, let me tell you something it's not worth it. Everyone that knows you would morn your death just as though they were your parents. I know I would miss anyone even the most annoying of all people (yes I would), everyone I know is special although some people I say I don't want around I don't want them to DIE or be killed!!! Especially by sucide!!! Oh what a terrible way to die. I wish everyone could die nice and warm in their beds...when they're like 110. No matter what you have to promise that you won't do that...think about your parents and friends...family!! "Dreams are not a reality, no matter how much we wish"-TanAngel |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
This is spooky but very well written!! You are a talent!! I myself have considered suicide many times!! But, there always seems to be something good around the next corner, just before I feel the pain and sorrow absorbing me and drawing me under!! Take Care Bridgette Creation of woman from the rib of Man: She was not made from his head to top him; nor out of his feet to be trampled upon by him; but out of his side to be equal with him, under his arm to be protected, and near his heart to be loved." |
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AVANTI Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 664INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE |
you write ...beautifully... and you should not give away such talent to any pain that's hidden deep within... keep writing...and don't hurt yourself...nothing's worth it... you'll see a better brighter tomorrow... you will... you don't have to understand completely..to love completely... remember even the darkest night has a morning to meet...you'll understand someday..Avanti Rao |
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Amy J. Renz Junior Member
since 1999-11-06
Posts 26Newark, NJ, USA |
This is a hauntingly familiar poem, I myself tried the same thing, but was unsuccessful, thank god. You captured the feelings I experienced and then some. Thankyou for sharing this, I know it means a lot to me and probably to many others. I am an acquired taste, I'm anchovies. Not everyone likes those hairy little things. Tori Amos |
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kari Member
since 1999-10-03
Posts 104Hyde Park, Ut, USA |
It makes me want to cry reading something so awful. People are going through with things like that all over... just because no one can take the time to notice them or help them along their way in life. Your poem as very powerful and I hope that we can all cling onto life instead of making a mistake that harms not only ourselves but the countless people around. Very well done! |
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catwomen Junior Member
since 2000-02-05
Posts 49 |
Your poem echos feelings I had long ago Nothing is worth it. Things do get better no matter how bad (trust me I know) believe in yourself and your strenght will prevail |
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Lady Bere Member
since 2000-02-03
Posts 73Valmeyer, Illinois USA |
You have made me stop and contemplate my own mortality. Like others, I have at one point in my life thought of suicide as an option. It isn't. Use that gift of writing to express yourself. It will make you stronger than you could ever believe. |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Indeed Suicide is never worth it. As you know this is too graphic for this forum, so I have decided to close it. It IS not a stab at you friend. But we must abide the Passions rules. Get in touch if you want to discuss this further. Let your heart guide you. It whispers, so listen closely. ~Isis~ (Sovereign of the Spirit) |
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