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G. A. Webb Member
since 2000-01-21
Posts 441Stanton, California, USA |
Laying alone while in my bed I ponder words which I have spoken Juggling dreams trapped in my head All like chains yet most are broken Longing for a love I know that was jaded Reflecting on times that have gone by Remembering her words and how quickly they faded Writing through the blur of the tears that I cry How come I give my love so free Only to find myself ignored Or is it that I've failed to see That it is my love of which she is bored I remember she told me I touched her soul One cold and crisp moon lit night Now it's with my heart that I pay the toll Watching my dreams falling from sight Why is it that there's no one for me To cherish love and adore Is this the way it's supposed to be To merely live and love no more I sit down and write this all for you To see the pain that I have taken These words weren't meant to misconstrue Rather to show my love which she has forsaken G.A. Webb [This message has been edited by G. A. Webb (edited 01-24-2000).] |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Very good....you've nailed the meter and rhyme scheme..I hope you showed it to 'her' so she'll see what a creative guy she's missing out on! good luck! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I love this poem..it is so well written and so emotion filled. This kind of cadence and rhyme are some of the hardest to write..but you made it look so easy... I have poets envy right now..  take care Janet Marie |
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G. A. Webb Member
since 2000-01-21
Posts 441Stanton, California, USA |
Poet deVine...Thank you. I did show it to her. I used to only show her my work for she was my chief inspiration and the reason that I started writing, not only for these dark poems but for the love poems that I've posted in open poetry #5. Unfortunately she doesn't feel the same way about me. Oh well, it was beautiful while it lasted. Thanks again. Janet Marie...thank you, but you need not envy me. I'm honored just to know that my writing touches somebody else besides me. Thanks again. |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
You are a special soul, do not let anything convince you otherwise. You have a gift of writing, imagery and understanding, you will find happiness as such as I am typing this now. Be patient my friend, and continue to see the beauty around you and continue portrayed it in your work. (HUGS) Let your heart guide you. It whispers, so listen closely. ~Isis~ (Sovereign of the Spirit) |
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