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Open Poetry #32

Love from Afar

devinechild22
Senior Member

since 2002-08-28

Posts 571

0 posted 2004-05-05 08:52 PM

I haven't written in a while so please forgive me if this isnt the best.

Can't have you.
Can't hurt you.
You're just too good for me
Can't breathe.
Can't feel.
I can't get you to see
Can't stop.
This feeling

Just

won't

die.

Larry C

Member Patricius

since 2001-09-10

Posts 10286
United States

1 posted 2004-05-05 08:54 PM

devinechild22,
I think (I can't be sure) that this is one of the few topics where time is our friend. Eventually...it gets better. Nice write (ignored the disclaimer).

If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again.

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

2 posted 2004-05-06 03:06 AM

an accurate description, yes

garysgirl

Member Laureate

since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

3 posted 2004-05-06 03:34 AM

devinechild, this is good writing.....
it has lots of feeling in it.
Hugs,
Ethel

Lost Awhile
Junior Member

since 2004-05-06

Posts 17
UK

4 posted 2004-05-06 03:59 AM

This is nice very nice.
You seem able to put so much into so few words. Good writing.

devinechild22
Senior Member

since 2002-08-28

Posts 571

5 posted 2004-05-06 04:59 PM

Thanks a lot for the feedback. It makes me feel good to know that people read my stuff.
*Allison*

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