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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn 
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Here I am Practicing again Placing words on a page In much the same manner As a child at the piano Tapping out his exercises And wondering If the notes will ever be ordered Into a meaningful melody Searching for the right combination From among the blacks and the whites And lately Though, I struggle enough with the melody It is the meaningful part That troubles me most So, I continue rehearsing For the poem that might say something Putting words in straight lines That from a short distance Might resemble a formation of ants One hundred and ten small insects Obscured by their burden All, Carrying thoughts of various sizes Some, Up to ten times their own tiny weight |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
 ~unique~ damn, you're too good |
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MovesInSilence Member
since 2004-03-21
Posts 111Perth, Australia |
Even if i searched for more beauty in your words, i would need a magnifying glass, and in doing so they would surely ignite. Very cool poem Wranx  |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
I think you found a great melody! |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
practice makes perfect |
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dingusjr Member
since 2003-09-24
Posts 415Missouri |
Yup...good, good |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Always enjoy your musings Ed, your last line brought to mind a favourite line from a song that reads: "with an ounce of pain, i wield a tonne of rage" l@ve that song, l@ve your work keep hitting those keys |
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Greeneyes 
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
I really enjoy your words....this is wonderful ED! ~~**~~ |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
quote: An incredibly creative vision! Wow, now ants will always remind me of you! Love, Margherita |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
...me thinks you are well practiced dear poet |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Ya cheer me up, mon! I've never read one of your poems that didn't talk straight to my innards, but this one -- especially at this moment, having just lost seven poems to the washing machine -- I wish I'd written. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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GlisteningRain Member
since 2004-05-06
Posts 103The clouds |
Obscured by their burden... heh...it's the title of a book. -Jai of Heaven |
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MGROVES
since 2004-02-01
Posts 3802california |
yep another good one indeed  |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
Genius, always. |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
All, Carrying thoughts of various sizes Some, Up to ten times their own tiny weight Ahuh, incredible YOU!  brother Ed Maree xx The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colour, but the sea, does not change. |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
You come up with the most unique concepts yanno Yeti and good thing too! Really liked this comparison tons!Today I'm only moving clouds, tomorrow I'll try mountains. |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
one hundred and ten times ten equals a whole lot of picnic you bring to this blue blanket bravo |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
Your words carry many times their weight! Sadie |
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