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And here begins
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And here begins |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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And here begins This is where the song Begins A mark in time I’m sure This a voice to listen in And fall to depths of pure This is where the song implies The heart of one’s own soul The timely keep of lover’s leap This destiny, your goal This is where the flowers lie A bower at your feet This is where my heart once died And a dirge My mind Digs deep This is where The hollow sings The lamplight glows So dim This is where My falters lay A grave, to memory’s whim. Karilea - if I whisper, will you listen? Keeping in mind, I must stand close... |
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azblond Senior Member
since 1999-07-01
Posts 637The Steamy Desert |
I will simply say...well done. Let my words fall first upon deaf ears before a closed mind... |
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loner187 Member
since 2004-03-21
Posts 106Upstate New York |
This leaves me wandering about my own beginning...nicely done, indeed What if the hokey pokey is what it's all about? |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
I like this poem very much, but it is the skillful structure of it that truly is impressive. Thank you for sharing it. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
very uplifting |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
You have such a nice way of reflecting.... These lines are melancholy shades of life but so well written... "This is where My falters lay A grave, to memory’s whim" Eric Ain't doin nothin at all |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
This is where the flowers lie A bower at your feet This is where my heart once died And a dirge My mind Digs deep This is where The hollow sings The lamplight glows So dim This is where My falters lay A grave, to memory’s whim. amazing work, as always! |
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dingusjr Member
since 2003-09-24
Posts 415Missouri |
I am always impressed by your talent... thank you for sharing it with us. |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Karilea, I really like your rhyme scheme in this one. A little different for you, but very good, still.  |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Excellent write, dear Karilea! And deeply touching in its melancholy. Love and hugs. Margherita  |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Excellence. I never read a poem of yours without going away a better person, and a better writer. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
B E A U T I F U L !! |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
....a grave to memory's whim. What an outstanding line to conclude this beautiful penning!  ...jo |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
Again...masterful. Eric |
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AniKay83 Member
since 2000-06-28
Posts 388Missing Since 1999 |
WOW smooth people stray by slinking onward |
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Patricia Member Elite
since 2003-04-06
Posts 2160Missouri |
This is an amazing piece, K. I feel as if I read another side of you. Does that make sense to you? I will tell you, your words have impacted my thoughts this night and perhaps for days to come. Superb piece. Patricia |
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