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Ratleader

Member Rara Avis

since 2003-01-23

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0 posted 2004-06-06 09:27 AM

sand and you

the barest contrast
of sand and skin

I can’t say
where it stops
and you begin

do you? does it?
shimmers of heat
from sand and you

the same golden
warmth mounding
beneath my hands

yes, this is how...

you’re softer

Martie

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since 1999-09-21

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California

1 posted 2004-06-06 09:31 AM

Ed

A dear comparison of soft and glisten. Loved it!

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

2 posted 2004-06-06 09:47 AM

Oooh how warm this is!!

Well done.
Hugs~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
Dancing with you in the summer rain~

Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

3 posted 2004-06-06 09:49 AM

I like these shadings
of light...

Well done, Sir. Puts me in mind of one of my favorite poets.

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

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displaced

4 posted 2004-06-06 12:52 PM

wonderful! !

suthern

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since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

5 posted 2004-06-07 03:20 PM

shimmers of heat
from sand and you

You see in ways we can only envy... you write in ways that make us strive to see more. *S*

Beautiful write!!!

CastleGuard
Senior Member

since 2003-04-30

Posts 760
Alberta, Canada

6 posted 2004-06-07 06:29 PM

Heh, nice sensual image there.

Well done.

CG

Startime55
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since 2003-04-05

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Alberta, Canada

7 posted 2004-06-07 06:30 PM

*grin* softly said...I love the way you wrote this poem...

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

8 posted 2004-06-07 07:03 PM

Aha...one touch and you figured it out...yes women are softer...it always pleases me...James

CastleGuard
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since 2003-04-30

Posts 760
Alberta, Canada

9 posted 2004-06-07 07:06 PM

...though sometimes they can slip thru your fingers...

...quicker than the sand...

CG

iliana
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since 2003-12-05

Posts 13434
USA

10 posted 2004-06-08 02:16 AM

Very lovely comparison!

garysgirl

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since 2002-09-29

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Florida, USA

11 posted 2004-06-08 02:21 AM

Very good poem, Ed. It has
a tenderness about it.

Hugs,
Ethel

GG
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since 2002-12-03

Posts 3532
Lost in thought

12 posted 2004-06-08 03:27 AM

Very tender...
I like!

Always, Alyssa

Poems are made by fools like me,
But only God can make a tree.
Joyce kilmer

LeeJ
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since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

13 posted 2004-06-08 08:16 AM

well, if it doesn't her, it does me

As always a pleasure reading you

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