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forne_marin Member
since 2004-04-13
Posts 140Spartanburg, South Carolina 
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The red Volkswagen. That's what I remember about her most. Oh, you may say that there's nothing like A riverside apartment, A cozy little love shack, But it's the Volkswagen I remember most. The way the engine hummed, The way it rumbled along, The bad gas mileage, I don't know why. Oh, I miss her sometimes, When she beep-beeps through my heart. I believe the most important component of a poem is rhythm. Rhythm is the heartbeat of a poem. It is what makes poetry poetry. [This message has been edited by forne_marin (05-14-2004 06:20 PM).] |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Loved the Bug! I had a bug in early years and my first love and I had wonderful times sharing the ride in it. This speaks to me.  |
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Decaflame Senior Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 1635 |
My brother had a Volkswagen that he loved dearly... this brought back a smile. |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
 This is cute. Of course, you misspelled Volkswagen, which threw me for a minute. This is a very sly poem. Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Haahaa...Heehee! Mine was a 1970 Forrest Green Karman Gia. Great write! JL She said: ”You look cute in the dark.” |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Jonathan~ As 'cute' as this entire piece was ... 'Oh, I miss her sometimes, When she beep-beeps through my heart.' ... this just stood out to me~ LOVED that thought~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
this is precious |
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