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Kaoru

Member Elite

since 2003-06-07

Posts 3892
where the wild flowers grow

0 posted 2004-05-14 02:53 AM

You
abandoned me,
before I could emerge
from
the dust.

I left a trail of flowers and honey
behind me.
A pensive hope to be devoured
by the bees.

It was here
that I swallowed a thousand goodbyes,
never finding one that could satisfy.

I felt a heartbeat,
below the ground
haunting the soil.
This once was my grave,
that I am standing upon.

I yearn for night,
the chill of winter comes only then.

If only
I would not have to struggle
to keep this flower alive,
bound by it's breath and
it's wilting petals,
I will heat it with my anger
and unrequited love.

There is nothing quite like this,

the earth is heaving a heavy sigh.

iliana
Member Patricius

since 2003-12-05

Posts 13434
USA

1 posted 2004-05-14 02:56 AM

"It was here
that I swallowed a thousand goodbyes,
never finding one that could satisfy."

Brilliant lines (tho' sooooo sad) -- heartfelt......

.......jo

Dark Angel
Member Patricius

since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

2 posted 2004-05-14 04:28 AM

Amazing!

you have me sighing heavily with this Kaoru

it's definitely a keeper.

Maree

The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colours, but the sea, does not change.
~Stevie Nicks~

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

3 posted 2004-05-14 10:38 PM

no there never is anything like this, is there..
such beauty even within the pain; you wear it o so well dear poet

Martie

Moderator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

4 posted 2004-05-14 10:47 PM

Kaoru

The depth of feeling in your poetry is amazing.

gemjop
Member Elite

since 2002-11-18

Posts 2587
Pencilveinia, USA

5 posted 2004-05-15 01:19 PM

you make me want to writhe around in agony.

you are nothing short of special, poetess.

JL
Member Ascendant

since 2004-04-01

Posts 6128
Texas, USA

6 posted 2004-05-15 01:54 PM

Excellent write! Enjoyed the read.

JL

She said: ”You look cute in the dark.”

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

7 posted 2004-05-15 02:04 PM

sad painful imagery

I know what you feel

Ericc
Member Elite

since 2003-01-31

Posts 4178

8 posted 2004-05-15 02:43 PM

Wow...!!!

Eric

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

9 posted 2004-05-15 03:21 PM

Melancholia drapes well over you
when you do it such justice.

GlisteningRain
Member

since 2004-05-06

Posts 103
The clouds

10 posted 2004-05-15 04:06 PM

That was pretty ill.

B

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