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In Search of Cygnus (Haiku)
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In Search of Cygnus (Haiku) |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
The birds in snowlight peer through wire-sculpted trees in search of Cygnus. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
had to look up that word...and now that I know it, this is excellent! |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
passing shadows, I love to watch the constellations, and Cygnus is one of my favorite, flying northward. Can't wait for warmer days! Take care and thanks for the read and compliment. Sadie |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
this was a fine write after I looked up haiku and synru and (what was it...cognac?....Cygnus |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
I love to gaze at the stars too! This is a very beautiful haiku, the seasonal element is present in "snowlight" I would say. The second line holds actually six syllables. Perfection would be seven, but the rules are not to be taken so rigidly. I love it. Love, Margherita  |
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garysgirl  
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Very good, Sadie.  Hugs  Ethel |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Haiku, Sadie. And well done! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Sadelite Good one, enjoyed. |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Sadie - your poem is beautiful - may I try one, similar to yours? (ahem) The Cuckoo's Nest men Look for Toerag's poetry In search of sickness. |
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Rdz9 Member
since 2003-03-16
Posts 142MT, USA |
Short, sweet, and much enjoyed. -Rdz One in a sea of millions has the power to change the world... |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
LngJhn, You surely can try good buddy, if I get a chance to respond to your response, too! Eggs from cuckoo's nest drop lightly in threes from trees being slightly cracked. Sadelite (Thanks for humoring me!) |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
Toerag, Are you saying that my poetry flows like brandy distilled from the whitest whines? You guys are goofy, ya know. That's ok...sppirits are nice once in a while aren't they? Sadelite Margherita, Thanks for stopping by and sharing your love of the night sky with me. About your comment--appreciated it, and I double checked my dictionary about the number of syllables in the words in the second line. It seemed ok, but perhaps there could be some colloquial differences in the pronunciation of -ed (I'm not sure to which word you're referring). Thanks for telling me(I did find a counting mistake in a posted senryu last week--how embarrassing. Thankfully, I caught it before too many people read it!) |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
gary's girl, I'm glad you enjoyed it, Ethel. I always enjoy reading your lovely thoughts, too. Sadelite Sunshine, Thank you for clarifying that; I always get confused about how to tell whether I've written a true haiku. I thought it was, but wasn't sure. Thanks again for your positive comment. Sadelite Seymour, Thanks for checking this one out-I'm glad it was enjoyable to you. Sadelite Rdz, "Short, sweet and much enjoyed!" I like that! Thank you for your short, sweet, and much enjoyed comment! Sadelite |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
One egg good, two bad Falling together from nest I am the good egg. One bad egg, Toerag, Was kicked out of the nest Because he was mean. The other bad egg, Was rascally Balladeer. A scalawag egg. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
W O W ! ! ! |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
Sure, Lng Jhn, I hear you... I think you might have confused things just a bit, though. I was certain that all three had a slight crack... Have a good one... Sadelite iliana, So you liked... All that star gazing paid off didn't it! Sadie |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big angel hugs) Yay! Awwwwwwwww, I love Cygnus and soetimes dream I'm soaring on her back over the prism castles of heaven, sweet friend, I'm a stargazer child I suppose, God Bless You, this is precious, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Sadelite, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "You'll find something that's enough to keep you |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
As a member of Haikuers Annonymus, allow me to say, "wonderful job". Cheers, JThere is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar. |
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choshi Senior Member
since 2004-01-01
Posts 1184New York |
Oh Sadie, that wish for Spring!!! Such strong visuals here every step of the way.....~P |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
Noah, Enjoy the dreams. They sound great. Sadie Jamie, You flatter me! Thank you. Sadie choshi, You couldn't have said anything that could have made me feel any better. Thank you. Sadie |
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Tara Simms Hall Member
since 2001-11-07
Posts 87South Carolina |
I loved this. I had to read it when I saw the title. The first Valentine's Day I spent with my husband, I named a star for the two of us...as luck would have it, it's in the Cygnus constellation. |
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