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1slick_lady
Member Ascendant

since 2000-12-22

Posts 6088
standing on a shadow's lace

0 posted 2004-02-01 06:22 PM

One Day…..

one day
if you wake
and you find
that you are tired
tired of the wait
tired of the longing
and all of the
emptiness combined
and find you want
to be loved
really loved by
one that will last
by someone that is
strong enough
to overlook the flaws
and weak enough
to be afraid too
afraid of the risk
and the past
someone strong enough
who can stand alone
but who will
be there
right or wrong
there for you
to be your bond
your heart
in wake and sleep
the place
where only
you belong
to catch
your every sigh
taste each tear
that you cry
for I do not want
second best
I want the place
where my heart
can rest
and I am
composed of strength
and weakness each
and I am here
waiting for you
yours and all
you have to do
is reach

[This message has been edited by 1slick_lady (02-01-2004 08:01 PM).]

Grover
Senior Member

since 2004-01-27

Posts 1967
London, ON, Canada

1 posted 2004-02-01 06:48 PM

Very loving words... you offer much. Very good, well structured poem. Grover.

Amara
Member

since 2003-02-23

Posts 158
East of the moon, west of the sun.

2 posted 2004-02-01 07:02 PM

"...strong enough
to overlook the flaws
and weak enough
to be afraid too..."

Beautiful!

"...one that will last..."

12th line down, I think...'one' doesn't fit, could it be changed to 'a love that will last..."?

Altogether, touching.

Light keep you always,
Amara

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

3 posted 2004-02-01 08:53 PM

(big angel hugs) God Bless You, sweet friend, love is always worth reaching for and extending your heart to the hope will reward all those who wait patiently all they desire! (kiss on cheek) Yay, I love this, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Helen, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"You'll find something that's enough to keep you
But if the bright lights don't receive you
You should turn yourself around and come back home" MB20

jaicie114
Senior Member

since 2003-09-27

Posts 750
On the edge of forever

4 posted 2004-02-01 09:00 PM

This is beautiful, Helen. Thank you for sharing.

Love and Light...jc

This I know as Truth...we are all Beings of Light.

iliana
Member Patricius

since 2003-12-05

Posts 13434
USA

5 posted 2004-02-01 11:48 PM

I hope he read this -- it was stunning.

Krawdad
Member Elite

since 2001-01-03

Posts 2597

6 posted 2004-02-02 01:27 AM

h,
Richly writ!
Spills down the page in more ways than one.
e

And perhaps one day . . .

Richy
Member Elite

since 2003-05-03

Posts 3050

7 posted 2004-02-02 01:38 AM

I don't know if I could have
described it any better...

This touched me deeply
Thank You

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

8 posted 2004-02-02 04:29 AM

you are so full of love! just beautiful!

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

9 posted 2004-02-03 01:06 PM

for I do not want
second best
I want the place
where my heart
can rest

How very beautiful this is... An excellent write... with a wonderful ending. *S*

muted

Member Elite

since 2004-01-15

Posts 2949
Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving

10 posted 2004-02-03 06:08 PM

youve captured love so well, the flaws, the strengths, very nice!

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