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Another,Typical Savage (Valentines day poem)
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Another,Typical Savage (Valentines day poem) |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
In an aisle that once held, valentines, plenty: Don Juan, I ain't , this eve, that's for sure, Just another forgetful, typical savage That paces the card-counter floor (last minute) When all of the good slots, show shadows of empty. * The flower shops barred-up, at five-o'clock; Supermarket mums, and pink carnations Wilt in metal-sleeve caskets; It's then I find it, one perfect, red rose Alive in the center of rotting torinias, (I would pay the full price I supposed) * I love you, I do, so I thought I might write you, A romantic poesy , a ditty, or two, ( but Pablo wrote much better, romantic novels) So a sonnet of his I would chose... I copy the lines of the heart swelling verse All penned by the master, sign my name On the bottom, (giving the bard, credit due) (But back to the rose, that I bought, stanza two) * The lines are Chilean, and so is the rose Picked from a garden where summer is winter, And lovers share Valentine roses and kisses; Sitting park benches, pitching warm woo.. * I pick up the flower and pin it to prose, Place the love tokens, in the palm of your hand; That show you have over me, loves warm dominion, (Hope is they'll show what this poor savage planned) |
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Michelle_loves_Mike
since 2003-12-20
Posts 1189Pennsylvania |
Oh how sweeeet! I really like this! Michelle I wish all could find the true happiness I have found,,in the eyes of Mike |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
You made me smile. Good write! Love, Margherita  |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
ice, Well done my friend, enjoyed. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
This was lovely, I very much liked the change of meter throughout the poem.  |
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KristieSue
since 2003-01-31
Posts 1460PA, US |
cute ;-) Happy V-Day "Painting is poetry which is seen and not heard, and poetry is a painting which is heard but not seen." ~Leonardo da Vinci |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
cute write, made me grin |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
I pick up the flower and pin it to prose, Place the love tokens, in the palm of your hand; That show you have over me, loves warm dominion, (Hope is they'll show what this poor savage planned) Awww, this is so sweet. And, I'll bet whoever you do it for is very pleased!!  Hugs  Ethel |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Everyone should borrow a petal from this rose of a poem. Well done, Sir. |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(smiles) Awwwwwww, I love Pablo Neruda's poetry sooooooo much and you got me into loving his work more, sweet friend, yay! (big angel hugs) Your glowing heart shines with his rosepetal blood, sweet friend, God Bless You and may you have the most romantic, happy Valentines Day, yay, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Ford, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "You'll find something that's enough to keep you |
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Grover Senior Member
since 2004-01-27
Posts 1967London, ON, Canada |
Very romantic, very nice! Grover. |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
Michelle_loves_Mike Margherita Seymour Tabin iliana Kristie Sue passing shadows garysgirl Sunshine Mistletoe Angel Grover Big smiles to all.....Thanks you for reading and commenting... _______ice ><> |
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