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vlraynes
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

0 posted 2004-03-28 10:55 PM

breathing...

breathe...
in counted time
each second
closer
to the
last

exhale...
the pain of
loneliness in
cradled
memory
of the
past

inhaling...

breathe the innocence...

remember when it
didn't hurt
to
'be' -
to live the
emptiness of
just another
day...and
pray
forgiveness
for the selfishness...for
foolishness of
pity's weep

and then...

a final breath...

a prayer...

for granted
peaceful
sleep

-Vicky L. Raynes

"When the power of love overcomes the love
of power the world will know peace."
--Jimi Hendrix
[This message has been edited by vlraynes (03-29-2004 12:12 AM).]

Mysteria

Member Laureate

since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

1 posted 2004-03-28 11:07 PM

There are a lot of us that have breathed in that very same air, and perhaps still do. Nicely done Vicky.

Today I'm only moving clouds, tomorrow I'll try mountains.

MGROVES

Member Elite

since 2004-02-01

Posts 3802
california

2 posted 2004-03-28 11:17 PM

this was excellant i really loved this. glad i stopped by to read.

Skyfire

Member Elite

since 2000-12-27

Posts 3381
Riding

3 posted 2004-03-29 12:15 PM

*big hugs*

Martie

Moderator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

4 posted 2004-03-29 12:39 PM

Vicky

"a final breath...

a prayer...

for granted
peaceful
sleep"

With these words of poetry from you, I'm off to bed...thanks for the loveliness of them.

Snow

Senior Member

since 2000-10-16

Posts 1170
desert flower looking for rain

5 posted 2004-03-29 01:11 AM

i really enjoyed this read.

snow

"yet each man kills the thing he loves
by each let this be heard,
some do it with a bitter look,
some with a flattering word"
oscar wilde

iliana
Member Patricius

since 2003-12-05

Posts 13434
USA

6 posted 2004-03-29 02:24 AM

Nice, Vicky. So much depth.

muted

Member Elite

since 2004-01-15

Posts 2949
Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving

7 posted 2004-03-29 09:59 AM

my oh my, how deep this runs...lovely

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

8 posted 2004-03-29 02:49 PM

yes...loved the journey here

icebox
Member Elite

since 2003-05-03

Posts 4383
in the shadows

9 posted 2004-03-29 02:54 PM

"remember when it
didn't hurt
to
'be' -
to live the
emptiness of
just another
day..."

Yes, I do.

Grover
Senior Member

since 2004-01-27

Posts 1967
London, ON, Canada

10 posted 2004-03-29 03:43 PM

Super write!

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

11 posted 2004-03-29 03:49 PM

Well said...so much to gather from your thoughtful pen. TD

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

12 posted 2004-03-29 05:06 PM

YES...

you've been dancing in my HEAD now?

this very much kin to the way I think, trying to trick my mind into sleeping...

sea_of_okc
Senior Member

since 1999-06-15

Posts 568
Oklahoma City, OK, USA

13 posted 2004-03-29 10:31 PM

Very nicely written. I read this as being one's final breath but maybe that is just where my head is at.

Local Rebel
Member Ascendant

since 1999-12-21

Posts 5767
Southern Abstentia

14 posted 2004-03-29 11:11 PM

Savor those memories of innocence... we earned them.

GG
Member Elite

since 2002-12-03

Posts 3532
Lost in thought

15 posted 2004-03-30 01:55 PM

when it didn't hurt to be?
wow, err not even sure I do, that was a long time ago...
This is so... real.
I love it.

Always, Alyssa

He was a man of sorrows
...I am a girl of tears.

[This message has been edited by GG (03-30-2004 07:48 PM).]

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