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The Betrayer.
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The Betrayer. |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow 
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The sky is burning, angels ashes cover the pavement below my feet. As if the truth were hovering as a god above the flames, the trees moan when the wind strikes them in an adverse way. And crawling beside the eyes of winter, are the tongues of those who suffer, screaming for forgiveness, only to be denied. The clouds melt as the sun goes mad with power. So like the flesh that creates a heaven and a hell. Suffer my angels, cry the tears of the betrayer. |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
ive read your poetry often, but never responded because i just couldnt find the right words... but even if i fumble..im going to say that i find your writing very powerful. ...it has an impact that grabs the reader by the collar and pulls them in...very close up look at strong steadfast emotion... ..you always manage to knock me down..even if im too shy to tell you ~Dawn |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big angel hugs) No one should ever deserve to be betrayed except those who constantly betray, dearest friend, I send hugs out to all who fall victim to this madness, God Bless You, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Meghan, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "You'll find something that's enough to keep you |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Kaoru - stunning write and use of words just in the right places... BC |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
A note to muted...you are not alone. She often leaves many of us without words... More than often. Hugs, Meghan. |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
It is the power ... the moment portrayed that carries within such depth and awe of what is given...thereby being somewhat humbled and speechless.... well done. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Excellent, powerful write! *S* |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Your style is raw emotion...direct is good. TD |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
"screaming for forgiveness, only to be denied" powerful stuff here woman...h |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
This, sweet lady, was bliss for me to read: So like the flesh that creates a heaven and a hell." (not that the message is a cheery one--but it just so succinctly summed up one of the major tenets of my beliefs it gave me joy to read it from someone else--like finding family.  )Suffer my angels, cry the tears of the betrayer. and that is a perfect wrap. Excellent. |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Fan-bloody-tastic  M Beauty of the world which is soon to perish has two edges, one of laughter and one of anguish, cutting the heart asunder. |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
The clouds melt as the sun goes mad with power. life and death love and pain under the same sun so powerful and perceptive as always |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
Wow...!!!! Eric |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
ditto what everyone else said..."sit on top of the world and tell me how you feel...'cause what you feel is what I feel for you.." |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
bump |
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Rdz9 Member
since 2003-03-16
Posts 142MT, USA |
Nice write... powerful, enjoyed. One in a sea of millions has the power to change the world... |
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Jason Lyle Senior Member
since 2003-02-07
Posts 1438With my darkling |
I love your writing and style. Jason |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed...James |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
*bows to superior talent* This was extremely powerful, in a way it was almost disturbing, but I love it. Horses are my life |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
this was powerfully written, drawing picture perfect images, you have a great inventive tool that is profound. When reading you, your words pop out and talk to me as if your right there...terrific |
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