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Tais
Member

since 2004-01-28

Posts 92
Ontario, Canada

0 posted 2004-01-28 06:31 AM

[I was trying to write lyrics - but this is new to me - so I would like some help please.

Here, the singer would sing to peace, and the 'refrain' would be sung to the world. I would appreciate so much, any help which you would be kind enough to give me. Thanks!]

I long for you
everyday
Wished upon
in every dream
A reality
not a vision
which depends
on our courage
tolerance and
understanding

Take me in your arms
Show me freedom
of smiles
And tranquility
Let me spread
your wonders
of serenity
and assurance
which guides us to
our happiness

Don't hate me....forgive me.
Don't fight me....be my friend
Don’t judge me...hear me
Don’t kill me...save me
Ride with me...on the wings of peace

I stand by you
for my brother
In times
of rock-filled paths
when he is down,
feeling helpless
You become a breeze
in soothing voice
lifting him to
felicity

Take me in your arms
show me the way
of truth,
the route to justice
Let me feel
and rejoice
in total heartsease
that we can make
a difference
in our world’s future

Don't hate me....forgive me
Don't fight me....be my friend
Don’t judge me...hear me
Don’t kill me...save me
Ride with me...on the wings of peace

Greeneyes

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-09-09

Posts 9903
In Your Poetic Mind

1 posted 2004-01-28 07:50 AM

Hi, and Welcome to Passions we are glad you have joined our circle of friends, and family….

please check your email for a special greeting

Kindly

Greeneyes~

I lie awake at night
I reach out to touch
Feel you by my side
I reach I never feel you
Will I ever get to feel you again
Just one more time

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

2 posted 2004-01-28 08:07 AM

(smiles) Oh Tais, this is a most beautifully graceful debut, sweet friend, I too believe in peace so very much (My name Mistletoe Angel comes from the belief in my heart that Christmas should be every day of the year, where we give, share, love one another and create peace on Earth!) and I pray for it with you, God Bless You! Welcome to Passions, sweet Tais, may you be inspired by all of us here as we will all be inspired by your lovely words! I can't wait to read more of your wonderful words, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Tais, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"You'll find something that's enough to keep you
But if the bright lights don't receive you
You should turn yourself around and come back home" MB20

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

3 posted 2004-01-28 08:31 AM

Ahhhhhh...

This was outstanding!! I have no advise (not that I would be in a postition to give it) because I didn't find a thing wrong with it.

And by the way? Welcome!!!!

"sit on top of the world and tell me how you feel...'cause what you feel is what I feel for you.."
~Dido~

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

4 posted 2004-01-28 08:54 AM

WELCOME TO PASSIONS!
Much enjoyed your entrance post.
I look forward to more of your work.
~Hugs & Smiles, Nancy~

~ Is that love I see in your eyes...
or merely a reflection of mine? ~

Tais
Member

since 2004-01-28

Posts 92
Ontario, Canada

5 posted 2004-01-28 10:43 AM

Thank you...

Greeneyes, Noah (you are an angel), Susan and Nancy !

I am so glad that you enjoyed my work, and I look forward to getting to know all of you each time more.
This is a very wonderful website: very friendly, organized , wonderful work, talented people and so nice to be part of.

Once again, thank you for such the warm and tender welcome.

Tais

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

6 posted 2004-01-28 01:49 PM

I enjoyed this very much. Even poetry can be seen as a science by some...so much so, that they spend countless hours counting their feet.

Welcome to Passions! I look forward to reading more of your work.

Karilea - if I whisper, will you listen?

A Romantic Heart
Member Ascendant

since 1999-09-03

Posts 5496
Forever In Your Heart

7 posted 2004-01-28 03:21 PM

I write songs and you did a wonderful job here with putting your heart into it!

~ARH

love and hugs

Open your eyes, open your mind, open your heart, let me come in and show you love.....~ARH

Tais
Member

since 2004-01-28

Posts 92
Ontario, Canada

8 posted 2004-01-29 04:57 AM

Thank you so much...Sunshine and Romantic Heart!

I am glad you enjoyed.

All of your feedback and comments gives me inspiration to continue to write.

Tais

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

9 posted 2004-01-31 10:04 PM

A warm welcome to you Tais~
This was such a delight to read~

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