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Open Poetry #31

Better Than Me

lovejunkie
Member

since 2003-12-31

Posts 93
Indiana

0 posted 2004-01-27 08:46 PM

Better Than Me

Cry
Cry, baby, cry

Carve an X right through the paper
What would they think of you if you did?
Sit tight, little baby
Put the pen down

Hoop jumper

Play in the snow, little baby
I can see you’re new at this game
Sing and dance, little baby
Make the longhaired boys
Stumble at your glance

Keep them guessing, little baby
See more in the floor
Than you see in any book
The holy lands, little baby
Show them that you won’t believe

"All you need is love..." -The Beatles

Snow

Senior Member

since 2000-10-16

Posts 1170
desert flower looking for rain

1 posted 2004-01-27 08:49 PM

interesting write.

i like the edge and the tone to this piece...

snow

"...why does my skeleton pursue me
if my soul has fallen away?"
~p.neruda

EverRuss
Member

since 2003-12-31

Posts 66
Indiana

2 posted 2004-01-27 08:56 PM

As for the poem its unique, gives us something that we havent had before.

If my poems could talk they would mean more than the words

Russell

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