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sea_of_okc
Senior Member

since 1999-06-15

Posts 568
Oklahoma City, OK, USA

0 posted 2004-02-25 11:49 AM

Iridescent wings
Silken gossamer
Flittering flutter
Levitating her

Loftily sailing
Gentle spring breeze
Lively and fragrant
New budded leaves

Sweet scented meadow
Of riotous blue
Cornflowers swaying
Shedding cool dew

Feathery landing
Vibrant orange sheen
Butterfly monarch
Most beautiful queen

Steven Seaman
In every heart there is darkness else how could we know light?

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

1 posted 2004-02-25 11:51 AM

Light and soft.

"sit on top of the world and tell me how you feel...'cause what you feel is what I feel for you.."
~Dido~

aujussy wolf

Senior Member

since 2003-08-09

Posts 1215
Michigan

2 posted 2004-02-25 06:00 PM

Very cool ... this would be a great one to give to your lady .... great rhymes too

Grover
Senior Member

since 2004-01-27

Posts 1967
London, ON, Canada

3 posted 2004-02-25 06:11 PM

So warm, inviting-- pleasant images! Grover.

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

4 posted 2004-02-26 04:20 AM

that she is!

great piece!

Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius

since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

5 posted 2004-02-26 08:14 AM

Reading your critique I can say in mho that this has no room for improvement. It's perfect the way it is.
The monarch is beautiful and your descriptive poem brings much to the minds eye view. Thank you for sharing.

Seymour Tabin
Member Empyrean

since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

6 posted 2004-02-26 08:39 AM

sea_of_okc
A good write and a good read.

BloomingRose
Member Elite

since 2000-08-09

Posts 3092
Florida

7 posted 2004-02-26 08:42 AM

Simply beautiful.

Deb

Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

8 posted 2004-02-26 01:13 PM

Steven~
I am ever thankful this one winged my way~
Stunning~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram <))><

noles1@totcon.com

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

9 posted 2004-02-26 01:18 PM

I like this gentle beauty very much. *S*

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

10 posted 2004-02-26 01:38 PM

some things fly across more than our minds with wings painted such as those you describe..

nicely done sir.. I did truly enjoy the read

Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

11 posted 2004-02-26 07:22 PM

They truly are beautiful, aren't they. I
enjoyed your descritiveness, the pieces
fell together nicely.

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