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In The Last Place That I Looked
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In The Last Place That I Looked |
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Richy Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 3050
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In The Last Place That I Looked I never really knew exactly, where my heart belonged I’d wander in from town to town, but everywhere seemed wrong I tried to do the best I could, it never was enough Every time my cards were shown, it always was a bluff I always had to fight someone, to let my soul be free That person who would never take me in, was always me Everything I wanted, seemed to be behind a wall Every time I tried to climb it, I would always fall I’ve hiked so many miles, but I never really moved My feet were taking steps, but nothing ever would improve I scaled one more peak to see, a wasteland down below The trail only went one way, with no where else to go I finally realized that I would, never find the end I crawled out to the very edge, and started to descend I walked into the dessert, looking for a flake of snow They said I wouldn’t find it, but I really didn’t know You’re looking for a miracle, is what they said to me You’re looking for one drop of water, in a deep blue sea I tried to let the wind release, my spirit to the sky I waited for the tears to fall, and hear the thunder cry But all I felt was scorching pain, as I began to burn I failed every chance I got, and now it was my turn I fell down to my knees and then, I lifted up the sand I felt each second I had wasted, falling through my hands I stared into the sun and said, please take away my eyes This is all I have to give, for living all my lies I looked until the sky was black, and fell down on my face I didn’t have no dignity, I now was seeking grace I felt somebody touch me, and a light began to glow That day out in the dessert, When the sky began to snow |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
you are a treasure Richy, to give in completely, to humble yourself, and to find a miracle all your own...must be a marvelous thing indeed. and here im waiting for the snow as well...  this is such a deeply touching write, im sorry im unable to explain how deeply this affected me....  take care of yourself. |
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HopeS Member Elite
since 2000-12-22
Posts 4596Perth Western Australia |
hey Richy a great poem of life and ones own introspection !!! and just to prove miracles do happen I am always touched by the way you express Hope |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
I always had to fight someone, to let my soul be free That person who would never take me in, was always me I can relate *s M |
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Youngatheart Member
since 2003-12-30
Posts 333 |
Richy! I have been looking and looking for your next post and this one was well worth the wait!!!!!!!!!!!! Outstanding and I ADORE the title!!!!!! Youngatheart |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
A treasure to behold!!!!!! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Richy Grear read enjoyed very much. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I felt somebody touch me, and a light began to glow That day out in the dessert, When the sky began to snow ~*~ Touching...very very touching... thank you Richy. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
"I felt somebody touch me, and a light began to glow That day out in the dessert, When the sky began to snow" Wonderful heartfelt write Richy.. with an ending that blew me away. Excellent..absolutely excellent. Hugs~
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Richy Deeply touching and thought filled poem. Thank you for sharing so much of yourself here.  I am just a traveler looking for a home, finding I carry it around with me, and sometimes it's just too heavy. |
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ParisGrl Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 610 |
Richy, This poem is very touching......as always I enjoy reading your work. Take Care, ~Laura~ |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
oh Richy, I missed this last night when I was up late  what a nice read for the afternoon here now when I wake you always touch my heart |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Richy this is a  and going into my library! Awesome! Chris "At one glance |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
I tried to let the wind release, my spirit to the sky I waited for the tears to fall, and hear the thunder cry This is indeed very touching, dear Richy. You just took me on a journey of deep psychological research and ... in the end I found you, baring your beautiful soul. Love, Margherita |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
so much truth and wisdom in your words.. thank you for this gift to all. |
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Kristabell Senior Member
since 2003-11-29
Posts 678Portland, OR |
Deep deep writing. Great writing about how you see it. Glad you found your miricle. I am still waiting. I am glad you can put it into words. |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
Richy, Great to see a serious poem and one looking toward inner self... and showing us your most intimate thoughts... ~Thank You ARH  love and hugs Open your eyes, open your mind, open your heart, let me come in and show you love.....~ARH |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I always had to fight someone, to let my soul be free That person who would never take me in, was always me Are we related? *S* This is simply wonderful, my friend... it touched this heart deeply. *S* |
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