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GG
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Lost in thought

0 posted 2004-02-16 12:06 PM



Could my arms
hold you tight enough
to choke your pain away?
Could I replace your breath with mine
to let you live today?

If I cried enough
to saturate your soul
then calmed you
with a song...
If I wrote a poets words
upon your heart
and told you just
how strong you are...
If I did this
would you be dying?

If I gave you wings
and set you in the breeze,
let you soar above the seas...
If I gave you shoes and feet
to dance...
Then would you have a
second chance?

Is there some way
that I could give my life
to let you live?

He was a man of sorrows
...I am a girl of tears.

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aujussy wolf
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1 posted 2004-02-16 01:23 AM


a strong poem , of a passion , highly emotional ... makes me feel heavy ...thanks for sharing it...
wolf

iliana
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2 posted 2004-02-16 02:08 AM


GG -- I like this one and understand your feeling and the emotion.  What compassion.  You've been putting out some great work, young lady!
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3 posted 2004-02-16 02:38 AM


gawd I love you!
GG
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4 posted 2004-02-17 01:38 AM


wolf,
yea, definitely some heaviness here.... thanks for your reply.

iliana,
they say that pain can make a poet's words powerful and great..... Thanks for your always kind replies.

Dix,
I love you, too...

Always, Alyssa

He was a man of sorrows
...I am a girl of tears.

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5 posted 2004-02-17 09:19 AM


Alyssa~
You softly touch the realm of remember with a tenderness that squeezes the heart~

I love ya' girlie~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram <))><

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6 posted 2004-02-17 01:59 PM


If I gave you wings
and set you in the breeze,
let you soar above the seas...
If I gave you shoes and feet
to dance...
Then would you have a
second chance?

Is there some way
that I could give my life
to let you live?


Alyssa, this is such a sweet, tender and
compassionate poem. It shows your heart, and
it's beautiful, sweet lady.
Hugs  
Ethel

GG
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Lost in thought
7 posted 2004-02-17 06:35 PM


Marge,
I just wish doing that could make him live ...thank you for your reply *hugs* I love ya too.


Ethel,
thank you so much. Yea, this is my heart, bare and broken and still it doesn nothing to help him breathe... But I guess we're just to do what we can, I hate that. Again, thanks for your sweet reply.

Always, Alyssa

He was a man of sorrows
...I am a girl of tears.

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