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muchos Member
since 2003-11-29
Posts 102 |
Screaming lonliness from these trickled rows Caused by tear drops fallen on my dampened cheek Funny, theres so many, yet nobody knows We're all the same so saddened and weak Waiting for someone to notice or acknowlege us We cry from dusk til dawn on each of these days Staying out of your way, not causing a fuss And praying to be happy in useless kind of ways But somehow we are the forgotten ones The ones who are chosen last And at school, we are the ones to bring guns Watching your lives fly past us very fast Envying you, your cars, your money, your lovers Wishing we had just of a piece of your life Instead we're at home hiding under the covers And to our wristis a solid pressed knife We never go through with that harsh act But one time our life it may claim It is a proven fact While your left with thoughts of blame Next time we cry or look your way A simply smile will do It might make our day Our life could be saved because of you. |
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Lexy Senior Member
since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038California |
good. I can relate to your perspective. But I don't feel that their coldness is a result of my pain. But cold hearts do contribute. |
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WinterWren Senior Member
since 2002-12-01
Posts 1044...Coming to |
Excellent poem, I agree with Lexy though. Beautiful job still, I think I like the begging the best, you got the emotions across well. W.W. |
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kissa~rachelle Senior Member
since 2003-11-27
Posts 988nowhere special |
i like this. I can defineltely relate to it., and i most defineltly get the point of the poem. I really liked the way you expressed everything. I want a relationship i can finally sink my teeth into.~ Alexander Sterling |
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