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Teen Poetry #7

The Weather of My Heart

blueyedlioness
Member

since 2003-04-24

Posts 289
USA

0 posted 2004-02-22 12:12 PM

This began as more of a song than a poem... can you tell I'm in love?

The sun was shining
when my heart cried out to you.
I was dying -
dying to know the truth.
The rain was falling
in my heart and mind,
and I was weeping
the day you said goodbye.
The sun was shining
when you smiled back at me.
I was dying -
dying to be free.
The rain was pouring
upon my flooded soul,
and I was weeping
the day you made me whole.
The sun is shining
sparkling in your eyes.
If I die now
it will be worth the fight.
The rain is stopping
my smile is not pretend,
and I'm not weeping
For today you hold my hand.

For you...
are everything to me.
You are my hopes and wishes,
every dream to be.
And you
control the weather of my heart.
For you are my sun,
you are the light to my dark.

skyshine

Member Elite

since 2002-02-07

Posts 3058
Beneath the northern stars

1 posted 2004-02-22 05:24 PM

Wow, I wonder what inspired you to write this. Well done--a nice walk throughout all kinds of weather. Keep it up! By the way, nice to see you here again.

~sky

Hold on, if you feel like letting go
Hold on, it gets better than you know....
~Good Charlotte

kissa~rachelle
Senior Member

since 2003-11-27

Posts 988
nowhere special

2 posted 2004-02-22 11:56 PM

I loved the way you used the whole weather thing. It was beautiful. The ending was amazing. And yes, i can tell you are very much in love. I am still seaching for that special feeling. I loved this poem.

~Kissa

I want a relationship i can finally sink my teeth into.~ Alexander Sterling

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