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Teen Poetry #7

The Problem of Time

tml_nut
New Member

since 2003-11-23

Posts 4

0 posted 2004-02-21 02:31 AM

hey ppl. I haven't been on in a little while, i dont write very often. Anyway i have a new poem, tell me what u think

Time is nothing but an idea
The body ages
Dates pass
Yet nothing has changed

Time is non-existent internally
The soul remains untouched
Yet it's sinking deeper into the quciksand of the past
Slowly pulling away from reality
With every second that's past

The soul is vounerable
Easily seduced by the drug
With time comes dependence
The blissfull substance is plentifull
And soon the soul becomes addictive

With time comes change
And soon all will be abandoned
The sould will become weak
Craving the niciten like substance
And the soul will become casted in cement
Untouched until the return of the drug

With time the drug will return
All will be salvaged
And with time all will be lost again

young_blood
Senior Member

since 2003-09-19

Posts 1115
Indianapolis, IN

1 posted 2004-02-21 12:12 PM

good work. it was an enjoyable read. check the spelling a bit. you had good ideas in there. once again, good work.
-alex

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