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drummerboy678
Member

since 2003-10-28

Posts 134

0 posted 2004-02-06 12:16 PM

Fickle fingers flutter,
to discover another,
to embrace and to hold.

Lost hands search
on crowded streets
with extended arms
and hopeful prayers,
intent on finding
the hand that fits
perfectly with theirs.

Short, but not sure where else to go with it. Comments would be great. (It's about the search for a soulmate)

NightFall
Member

since 2004-01-28

Posts 88
The land known as England

1 posted 2004-02-06 08:03 AM

And the search continues.
short but sweet and very well written.
Good job.
C.J

young_blood
Senior Member

since 2003-09-19

Posts 1115
Indianapolis, IN

2 posted 2004-02-06 09:59 AM

good start, maybe you could continue with the street search idea...i dunno. good stuff though
-alex

CwboyAtHeart
Senior Member

since 2001-04-14

Posts 541
Selah, WA, USA

3 posted 2004-02-06 12:27 PM

I really liked it. Short and simple, but had great flow and a great message. Thanks for sharing!

- C.K. Natland -

Nobody Is Perfect Until You Fall In Love With Them.

Lexy
Senior Member

since 2003-01-28

Posts 1038
California

4 posted 2004-02-06 09:28 PM

I like that the subject is "hands". Awesome start, you could continue, talk about why the hands you've come across haven't fit. Talk about eyes, or other body parts. Interesting.
I like this.
~Lex

kissa~rachelle
Senior Member

since 2003-11-27

Posts 988
nowhere special

5 posted 2004-02-07 10:43 PM

yes, i am searching to. It is a long and cruel path sometimes, and sometimes when you are happy and think you have found "the one" thier hand grows or something and doesnt fit anymoe.~lol I hope your search comes to an end soon, and you came across the "hand" that fits yours. I like ^^^ their ideas on expainding it.
~kissa~

**~kissa~**
*I wanna be a little more like me, and a little less like YOU!*~ Linkin Park

blueyedlioness
Member

since 2003-04-24

Posts 289
USA

6 posted 2004-02-15 05:08 PM

I like it *just* the way it is.

I really like your poetry.

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