On starvation and poverty.

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Teen Poetry #7

On starvation and poverty.

Ixxi
Member

since 2004-01-02

Posts 77
England

0 posted 2004-02-05 05:50 PM

A new born, dying from an emptiness;

A slow quiet death of nothing.

A painful heat from the never setting, dark side of the sun.

Dry with thirst and being lost.
.

A lonely cry left unanswered.

A desolate silence slices, cuts through the air.

A choked scream with no echo.

Hidden for ever. Smothered by blood-stained mist.

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Murdered by innocence.

eor
Senior Member

since 2002-09-26

Posts 959
blues & greys

1 posted 2004-02-05 07:00 PM

wow, this is intense, enjoyed reading this

"So what befalls the flawless?
Look what I've built, it shines so beautifully now watch as it destroys me."

WinterWren
Senior Member

since 2002-12-01

Posts 1044
...Coming to

2 posted 2004-02-05 07:45 PM

Yes, very intense piece. Sadly, very true to life.
Great job, thanks for sharing.

W.W.
We were meant to live for so much more have we lost ourselves?
Maybe redemption has stories to tell maybe forgiveness is right where you fell.

Ixxi
Member

since 2004-01-02

Posts 77
England

3 posted 2004-02-07 06:06 AM

Thanks for the encouragement guys, any helpful comments would be great also

. x

Skyfire

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since 2000-12-27

Posts 3381
Riding

4 posted 2004-02-12 03:35 AM

*bumping this* I really think that this is excellent

I don't see anything that needs to be critisised.

Horses are my life
"Poets have been mysteriously silent on the subject of cheese. "
--G. K.Chesterto

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