the quiet eyes's quiet life

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Teen Poetry #7

the quiet eyes's quiet life

young_blood
Senior Member

since 2003-09-19

Posts 1115
Indianapolis, IN

0 posted 2004-01-25 04:53 PM

following my freedom on frozen tracks
It seems that i've lost yesterday,
But maybe it found out the backway,
picking up the peices i now lack.
Papers that i lovingly burned
have appeared in my porfolios.
The thickness of the lost one grows
And the tables once again have turned.
Post those thoughts i held to you
on a public announcement bulletin board,
one for all, where problems are stored,
Mark it with white ribbon that says "new".
These are the tales of past mistakes,
Come now listen to the song of the Loon
In a year like this on a midsummer's afternoon,
Learn of what these relationships take.
Candied words rot our speeck and tongues,
It makes our kisses more difficult than all
to those on the outside who missed the cal,
We appeared to lose next to those who "won".
Because of these insueing thoughts
I'm pressing on farther into the forgotten past,
Leaving behind all who said yesterday wouldn't last
Just to show you the happiness you brought.
End the lights and cut the bright night,
Darkness clothes me and nak*dness is taboo
For those who only thought they wisely knew
The points of you in my eyes' quiet life.

now im alone, but not lonely like before

Lexy
Senior Member

since 2003-01-28

Posts 1038
California

1 posted 2004-01-25 05:12 PM

The ending was beautiful.
And I loved the idea of things you thought you got rid of comming back into your life.
Great poem.
I'm becomming fond of your writings.
~Lex

young_blood
Senior Member

since 2003-09-19

Posts 1115
Indianapolis, IN

2 posted 2004-01-26 10:52 AM

thanks alot. i really appreciate the feedback

kissa~rachelle
Senior Member

since 2003-11-27

Posts 988
nowhere special

3 posted 2004-01-26 05:23 PM

I agree with lexy, this poem is great, i really like it, you are very talented.
~kissa~

**~kissa~**
*I wanna be a little more like me, and a little less like YOU!*~ Linkin Park

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