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WinterWren
Senior Member

since 2002-12-01

Posts 1044
...Coming to

0 posted 2004-01-20 09:57 PM

I heard you crying last night,
screaming out for comfort
and choking on your pain.

I saw you trying to hide last night
burying your head in your hands
and hating this world.

I saw you turn away last night
but the truth showed in your face,
or was that just a dream?

I saw you crying last night
or was that me?

I hid my white knuckles behind my back,
my balled up fist of rage
there were too many things to be angry at.

I ran into the rain
to wash away the taste of you
but how can you wash away what you have never felt?

I whispered to the darkness what I knew,
"He is gone, one way or the other."
I heard no confirmation.

I screamed
a sound full of so many pent up feelings
and still I felt the same.

I turned away,
but the truth showed in my face
I wanted to tell you everything,
to hear your reassurance
is that what it would have been?

I wanted to tell you everything
but I keep this secret still
buried with my pain.

W.W.
We were meant to live for so much more have we lost ourselves?
Maybe redemption has stories to tell maybe forgiveness is right where you fell.

lone_rider
Junior Member

since 2004-01-20

Posts 19

1 posted 2004-01-20 10:36 PM

great poem..You've really thought about it and put your feelings into it! Keep writing i really enjoyed this one

skyshine

Member Elite

since 2002-02-07

Posts 3058
Beneath the northern stars

2 posted 2004-01-20 11:45 PM

Oh wow...I know what that's like....so often I've wanted to tell but can't bring myself to. Very expressive.

~sky

Hold on, if you feel like letting go
Hold on, it gets better than you know....
~Good Charlotte

ascending_ecstasy
Member

since 2004-01-21

Posts 102

3 posted 2004-01-21 10:02 PM

Okay this is one of the best I've seen on this forum. Good on you, it was a good poem. I liked it, and well done. Keep it coming. Please do, I'd like ot read more.

BrokenDreams
Member

since 2003-02-09

Posts 425
In The Clouds

4 posted 2004-01-21 10:44 PM

"I whispered to the darkness what I knew,
"He is gone, one way or the other."
I heard no confirmation."

These are my favorite lines, although the whole poem was strong, and really quite good. Nice write, and thanks for the read.
Jen

Whoever said "Tis better to have loved and lost than to have never loved at all" obviously never loved.

WinterWren
Senior Member

since 2002-12-01

Posts 1044
...Coming to

5 posted 2004-01-22 11:54 PM

Thank you all so much for the wonderful replies, they are very much appreciated.

W.W.
We were meant to live for so much more have we lost ourselves?
Maybe redemption has stories to tell maybe forgiveness is right where you fell.

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