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Love Angel
Junior Member

since 2003-11-04

Posts 25

0 posted 2003-12-07 03:37 PM

With all of my heart,
I just want to say,
How much I've grown to love you.
My only hope,
Is that you'll say,
You'll never give up, you love me too.

Why can't you see,
That you belong with me.
I reach for you,
While you look for something to hang on to.
I always try,
And I pray to the sky.
My only fear,
Is you'll find you want me when I'm not there.

With all that I am,
I'll make sure that I,
Bring out the best that's in you.
I cannot wait,
For you to say,
You're ready for us, we'll make it through.

Why can't you see,
That you belong with me.
I reach for you,
While you look for something to hang on to.
I always try,
And I pray to the sky.
My only fear,
Is you'll find you want me when I'm not there.

With all of my soul,
I'll give you my all.
I'll catch you if ever you may fall.

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

1 posted 2003-12-07 04:02 PM

(smiles) Awwwwwwwww, this is sooooooo beautiful, sweet friend, the most wonderful thing love can offer is comfort ones heart and know that everything will be alright always, and vowing to catch a loved one as one falls is the most giving wish of all! (big hugggsssssss) God Bless You, sweet friend, your poetry brings smiles to all our hearts, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"You'll find something that's enough to keep you
But if the bright lights don't receive you
You should turn yourself around and come back home" MB20

branden726

Senior Member

since 2000-09-25

Posts 607
Bay City, MI

2 posted 2003-12-07 05:51 PM

Hey most of all I liked the end the most. The thing I wanted to stress to you is it sounds like your trying to "rush" something and if you have a little bit of patience instead of trying to force something to happen it will and when it happens by itself its a much better feeling. Then you know the feelings are real because they happend themselves they weren't forced.

Nice post. Liked it alot.

lovergirl
Junior Member

since 2003-08-18

Posts 12

3 posted 2003-12-07 07:24 PM

I know how you feel.(sob...sob...sob)

lilibeelee
Member

since 2001-07-12

Posts 143

4 posted 2004-01-04 03:23 PM

very well written i like this one.

CwboyAtHeart
Senior Member

since 2001-04-14

Posts 541
Selah, WA, USA

5 posted 2004-01-04 03:47 PM

Wow... I really liked this. I could relate really well to it. It reads a lot like a song, I'm not sure whether that was your intent or not. As a song, it would turn out really well to add one more "verse" because you repeated one stanza twice, then had 2 other stanzas that were different from eachother... Just an idea. Thanks for posting, I liked it.

- C.K. Natland -

Nobody Is Perfect Until You Fall In Love With Them.

frolicking dolphin
Member

since 2003-02-23

Posts 268
my own special world

6 posted 2004-01-04 06:32 PM

Nice write, I really liked it, I also can relate to it a lot and I know what your going through

~*~Karen~*~

~You can close your eyes to things that you don’t want to see, but you can’t close your heart to things you don’t want to feel~

Love Angel
Junior Member

since 2003-11-04

Posts 25

7 posted 2004-01-04 06:46 PM

Thank you for all your replies. I really appreciate them.

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