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JosephF
Junior Member

since 2006-08-30

Posts 30

0 posted 2006-09-01 06:18 AM

Standing in the shadow of your glory,
Is this a horror story?
As I struggle to control my fury
The counter-balance goes topsy-turvy

Irritation,
Sensation,
Deliberation,
Fixation

I am forever blind by your everlasting beauty,
Too precious to touch,
But it tortures me, every single day
You take a step closer, and it rains rose petals

From the Highest Heaven, to the Deepest Depths of Hell,
I would follow you,
Like a man possessed,
A Fixed thought, drilled into my skull.

Expectation,
Elation,
Imitation,
Confrontation

So here I am, telling a story,
That would usually sound so corny,
Shall I release my fury?
Or continue to stand in the shadow of your glory?

patience_iago
Member

since 2006-08-30

Posts 54

1 posted 2006-09-01 03:38 PM

I really like the way this is written.

"There are some days where i believe i might die of an overdose of satisfaction"
-Dali

*Alli4000*

Member Elite

since 2004-03-21

Posts 3188
The World of Poetry

2 posted 2006-09-01 09:40 PM

Agreed with the person above me, this poem is written really well. I especially loved the line: "You take a step closer, and it rains rose petals"

Great write, hope to read more from you soon!

~Alli~

mgoodman1989
Member

since 2006-03-05

Posts 93
Iowa, USA

3 posted 2006-09-03 12:44 PM

Your a somewhat new member, so WELCOME!! Pip happens to be a great place to get your poetry out, and to be heard.

With that said. AMAZING poem Joseph! I really enjoyed reading this, and since this is the very first poem I've read by you, I'm not ready to give too much feedback. I enjoyed your piece, so lets see some more!!!

Much love,
Michelle

*I love him oh yes I do, he's for me and not for you, and if by chance you take my place, I'll take my fist and smash your face!*

hunnie_girl

Member Elite

since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

4 posted 2006-09-04 10:38 PM

i haven't read anything by you so i read this and i liked it it made a nice poem... i will look out for more of your work in the future

hunnie*

A true friend is someone who reaches for your hand and touches your
heart.

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