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This Feeling...
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This Feeling... |
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xox.ice.cream.lover.xox Junior Member
since 2006-01-07
Posts 20Canada |
I get this feeling... And I can't ever let go For you to stay forever, It's my only dream and hope I get this feeling... And I can't seem to resist Everything's magic Every word, every kiss This feeling... That I won't ever regret This feeling... That I can't ever forget. |
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bekahlekah45 Senior Member
since 2006-03-14
Posts 533 |
short but sweet : ) I like it alot good job |
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stargal Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352OR USA |
I liked this one a lot, and even though it was “short” I believed it packed a powerful punch behind the words… The only thing I really don’t understand in this would be the second line in the first stanza the “and” in that really throws me off for some reason. I don’t know, maybe I’m reading this wrong, but I believe when you first read that stanza you question where the second line comes into play. I could be wrong, but that’s just my opinion… The second stanza was awesome! It really went with the rest of the poem, I know that sometimes the middle stanzas are not as good as the first and the last, but this one was excellent… Great job on this poem, I can’t wait to see more from you  @-->--- |
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tapper798 Member
since 2003-07-20
Posts 353My own world |
I liked it :-) short but straight to the point. I esp. liked the 2nd stanza. |
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