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Why did you leave dad
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Why did you leave dad |
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xForgotten.Soulx New Member
since 2006-06-10
Posts 1England,London |
Everythink seemed perfect everythink seemed fine until u started all that dirty grime u made her feel worthless u made her feel depressed omg cnt u give it a rest u made me feel unwanted u made me feel upset i dont thnk i'll eva forget u kept me awake u kept me up crying i felt like u were leaving me here dying i didnt no about the first or second i knew about the third if only my mother could of heard i knew her name i knew her well if only i could make it repel u didnt no how much i knew u didnt know how much i cried i felt like u were giving us a ride everythink seemed perfect everythink seems fyn jus neva forget we were the ones who tried!!! |
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stargal Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352OR USA |
Hey xForgotten.Soulx, Welcome to piptalk! I hope you like it here and enjoy the site. Also, awesome first post! I know that I enjoyed reading this a lot... It was very good and i hope to see more writes from you in the near future  @-->--- |
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bekahlekah45 Senior Member
since 2006-03-14
Posts 533 |
welcome to pip! yes great first post. It was a really good poem, the rhythum was a little off in places, but all in all i did really enjoy this! Great job! cant wait to see more of your posts |
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