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Teen Poetry #7

the wrong way

sins_and_tragedies
Junior Member

since 2006-04-26

Posts 41
england

0 posted 2006-04-27 11:30 AM

The wrong way, no one ever does this,
We're the best of friends but at one time longed to kiss,

We have done things in opposite array,
But for us maybe God intended it this way.

I ended it all with following words from a friend,
From a pretend friend, who wanted my world to end.

You were my world, each breathe I took, everything I dreamed,
A friendship shouldn't come from this, but amazingly through the dark it beamed.

Maybe my mistake was some sign,
That you were meant to just be a great friend of mine.

I am feeling happy that we are still so close,
Even though we don't shared what I wanted most.

For now I understand what I have gained from all this,
A special friend, someone who for not one moment do I want to miss.

intention
Member

since 2005-11-13

Posts 59
New Delhi, INDIA

1 posted 2006-04-27 02:55 PM

You were my world, each breathe I took, everything I dreamed,

hey i like what u write ...some what like me

Love me for who i m

the_girl_next_door
Senior Member

since 2006-02-26

Posts 591
USA

2 posted 2006-04-27 09:38 PM

ok.. first off.. i just wanna say.. I know this feeling..

I loved your poem.. there was only one stanza that confused me.

"I ended it all with following words from a friend,
From a pretend friend, who wanted my world to end."

I don't really understand how this went with the rest of the poem.. I don't know if you were speaking hypothetically or if you were talking about another friend... or what..

But all in all .. I loved this poem.. and I can so relate..Keep it up..

~Heather

ps-just incase I havent' said.. "WELCOME TO PIP!"

Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes.
Want nothing & you will have everything.

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