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Teen Poetry #7

all alone

Lindsay
Member

since 2003-03-26

Posts 59
South Dakota

0 posted 2003-11-18 08:50 PM

Tears fall from my eyes
Makeup smeared and streaked, but I don’t care anymore
All I care about is getting out
Getting away from this pain
Blood is running down my arm
I call for help
Yet no one comes
I’m all alone

[This message has been edited by Lindsay (11-18-2003 09:02 PM).]

young_blood
Senior Member

since 2003-09-19

Posts 1115
Indianapolis, IN

1 posted 2003-11-18 08:57 PM

hmmmm....it was very personal, but i didnt think it was very good. sorry..it just didnt stick with me or anything.

now im alone, but not lonely like before

MissKlarmic
Member

since 2003-02-20

Posts 70
Canada,N.S

2 posted 2003-11-19 12:24 PM

naw, it was true.Help comes

frolicking dolphin
Member

since 2003-02-23

Posts 268
my own special world

3 posted 2003-11-21 04:09 PM

I think this one would be better if it were longer, I really like how it is, but you can show more emotion if it was longer.

~*~Karen~*~

~All our dreams can come true, if we have the courage to pursue them~Walt Disney

dertah
Senior Member

since 2003-06-18

Posts 584

4 posted 2003-11-22 09:24 PM

yessss.....loneliness

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