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mgoodman1989
Member

since 2006-03-05

Posts 93
Iowa, USA

0 posted 2006-03-11 04:21 PM

Perfect picture
kept inside
a permenant frame
within my mind

Making memories
built to last
you and me
forget the past

Small world
big hearts
dreams are broken
as lives fall apart

Hold hands
stand strong
lets be different
prove them wrong

Soft laugh
big smile
cant help but hope
we will last a while

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

1 posted 2006-03-11 05:50 PM

enjoyed this, I liked the flow...

latteaddict213

Senior Member

since 2006-02-17

Posts 523
Colorado

2 posted 2006-03-12 12:30 PM

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wwow. it flowed very well.

i really Love what its about all of the stanzas are perfect for each other. i judt really LOVED this poem. nice work.

           Jessica

    Character is what you
      do when you think that
         no one is loking--??

mgoodman1989
Member

since 2006-03-05

Posts 93
Iowa, USA

3 posted 2006-03-12 09:06 AM

Thank you guys for the positive replies. I appreciate your taking the time to read my work. Thanks again!

the_girl_next_door
Senior Member

since 2006-02-26

Posts 591
USA

4 posted 2006-03-12 02:18 PM

I loved this.. In fact.. it's going in my library.. Keep it up..you have a really good act for writing...

~Heather

Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes.
Want nothing & you will have everything.

stargal
Senior Member

since 2006-03-06

Posts 1352
OR USA

5 posted 2006-03-12 04:41 PM

humm... something tells me i should quit posting on your subjects! i never have anything new to say... all i know is your one great writer

I like the way you make your words all fit together, all your poems are like this...

Thanks for sharing

@-->---

*Alli4000*

Member Elite

since 2004-03-21

Posts 3188
The World of Poetry

6 posted 2006-03-17 07:12 PM

Awesome write! Loved every word of it, especially the last stanza!

~Alli~

mgoodman1989
Member

since 2006-03-05

Posts 93
Iowa, USA

7 posted 2006-04-07 05:14 PM

Thanks everyone that has posted, and anyone who posts after this... lol I enjoy reading all the things you have to say!

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