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young_blood
Senior Member

since 2003-09-19

Posts 1115
Indianapolis, IN

0 posted 2003-11-12 09:46 PM

down the secret place

i have a long ache in my head,
something that rings like train's bells.
i cant concentrate on what's ahead,
just painting life as a million hells.
can i just forget what i      so dearly?
ignore a yearning for your awaited      ?
cause and action,       atraction, fed so freely.
drink this cup, eat this bread, always holding your breath.
pound the drums in my brain till i explde,
let my thoughts rain down and cover the ground.
wait for the emptiness inside to implode,
lost in the things that were never found.
if only i could be so lost,
never caught with someone else again.
never let love melt hatred's frost,
wanting to be alone when i reach my end.
stop trying to reach out to me,
acting so kind, so nice, so true,
but lies are effective to set people free,
yet freedom is only imagined when you're through.
i would like to escape to a place of my own,
isolation could get to know me better than any other.
think to myself and never speak, even to deaf stones,
the           thoughts of when i was younger.
i'll make my own end,
bring about no more days,
wishing for the unknown friend,
death, so solitary in all his ways.

now im alone, but not lonely like before

dertah
Senior Member

since 2003-06-18

Posts 584

1 posted 2003-11-12 11:02 PM

ive got sunshine...on a cloudy day. i guess you say what could make me feel this way...my girl my girl my girl talking bout my girl...my girl. good write by the way.

Olive_8
Junior Member

since 2003-09-20

Posts 41
Canada

2 posted 2003-11-13 02:06 PM

I love it, i really do, it is going in my library!!! Thanks for the read it was amazing!!

~*Everything will be ok in the end, and if it is not ok, then it is not the end.~*

*~No man is ever worth your tears and the only one that is will

young_blood
Senior Member

since 2003-09-19

Posts 1115
Indianapolis, IN

3 posted 2003-11-14 05:43 PM

thanks for the comments, i really like them and need them!!

now im alone, but not lonely like before

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

4 posted 2003-11-14 06:11 PM

"pound the drums in my brain till i explde,
let my thoughts rain down and cover the ground.
wait for the emptiness inside to implode,
lost in the things that were never found.
if only i could be so lost,"

I really liked this here....

but the ending lines, sort of sound like suicide, and writing about that isn't allowed here....but all in all, I am hoping that part was just metaphorical....

young_blood
Senior Member

since 2003-09-19

Posts 1115
Indianapolis, IN

5 posted 2003-11-15 02:11 PM

of course its metaphorical, i hardly ever write plainly. im not a suicidal person by any stretch of the imagination and do not condone it at all.

now im alone, but not lonely like before

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