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Android 17
since 2001-07-21
Posts 664Winnipeg |
It was as if things were never wrong, Everything was right again. Joy and love can be felt, It was never this easy before. I could never see, What I never understood. We should never let broken promises, Go right to our hearts. If we can do that, only then will Pain not bleed into our lives. ... ... without a doubt ... ... i could never kill it ... ... the bak of my mind ... ... krawling ... ... koming bak ... ... running for miles ... ... going nowhere ... ... waiting for eternity ... ... for ... ... nothing ... ... i never asked for ... ... the insanity ... ... it ... ... uninvited agony ... ... i'm starting to enjoy this ... ... you put me here ... ... the end ... ... the eulogy only told of more... ... It was as if things were never wrong, Everything was right again. Joy and love can be felt, It was never this easy before. I could never see, What I never understood. We should never let broken promises, Go right to our hearts. If we can do that, only then will Pain not bleed into our lives. ... the insanity ... ... starting to make ... ... more sense ... ... what is ... ... it ... ... explain it ... |
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aussie teen Member
since 2003-09-27
Posts 396Australia |
this is really interesting and i love they way that you have written this... a hidden message in the first and third paragraphs... well done this one makes me think.. keep writing Ruth live life as if your going to die tomorow....... but love as if your going to live forever...... |
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Android 17
since 2001-07-21
Posts 664Winnipeg |
Thank you, very much! This one took abit more time than the other ones to do! |
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Marshalzu 
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
Wonderful writing Alex I really enjoyed the read, bold and underlined is not really my cup of tea and I would have enjoyed the secret message to have been a little more secret but all in all I thoroughly enjoyed the read and look forward to reading some more of you work  |
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Android 17
since 2001-07-21
Posts 664Winnipeg |
The bold and underlined is kind of like "If it's there, use it" in terms of poetry on the net. Thanks alot for your comments Andrew. What few commentary I get on my work is exciting---s it's not too popular ammoung the common folk :P |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
i lurve the underlined. broken hearts can only bleed. i think youve said it all. fall quietly... |
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Juju Member Elite
since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429In your dreams |
That was well done. -Juju Juju - 1.) a magic charm or fetish 2.)Magic 3.)A taboo connected woth the use of magic |
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WinterWren Senior Member
since 2002-12-01
Posts 1044...Coming to |
Wow this was really amazing. And obviously well thought out. I love the other messages we didn't see until you underlined them. Thought-provoking and touching, this is going in my library. Thanks for sharing. If I could fall asleep tonight |
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Android 17
since 2001-07-21
Posts 664Winnipeg |
Auww, thanks guys! It means alot to me to have comments on my poetry! |
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