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Teen Poetry #7

Phantom Beauty

CwboyAtHeart
Senior Member

since 2001-04-14

Posts 541
Selah, WA, USA

0 posted 2003-11-04 07:37 PM

Something I wrote today, pondering all the relationships that I see people get into that cause pain.  Let me know what you think.

PHANTOM BEAUTY

In the dark confines
Of his heart
Where love once flourished
Now is empty and forgotten
The unforgiving door
The only way in
Where once the phantom thief,
Disguised with beauty,
Entered through the arch
   It was different then
   Bright and beautiful...
   Innocence in its purest form
But when the culprit left
It took everything inside
And crushed what was left behind
   Where is the one
   Who can restore his peace?
Phantom Beauty
Stay away from this place

- C.K. Natland -

Nobody Is Perfect Until You Fall In Love With Them.

Ina
Senior Member

since 2000-10-09

Posts 1236
Quebec, Canada

1 posted 2003-11-04 10:20 PM

Hey Cody
I havent been on this site for...i cant remmemver howlong, i wouldnt have come back if you hadnt shown me your poem.
ITs very good, your style has changed alot since the beginning since whats it been 2 years back? you are becoming an excellent poet.

xoxo
Ina

Spine Grinder
Senior Member

since 2000-10-28

Posts 1127
Standing In Silence...

2 posted 2003-11-06 12:23 PM

Wow...I really liked this. The whole "phantom beauty" thing was great. I especially liked the last two lines. Awesome job.

"Cut my life into pieces, this is my last resort."~PaPaRoach

dertah
Senior Member

since 2003-06-18

Posts 584

3 posted 2003-11-06 01:01 PM

dude.......christmas is coming...

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