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Teen Poetry #7

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red_angel*16
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since 2004-09-04

Posts 71

0 posted 2004-12-08 04:54 AM

is it me or are we drifting away
i feel so far from you, day by day
you've changed so much
that i hardly know you at all.

we used to meet and kiss goodbye,
but now you wont even say hi.
you used to call and say "i love you,"
but now your always ignoring me.

rumors race through my mind
so many things i hear about you
that are like the truth,
i dont know who to believe
because you said you'll never hurt me no matter what
and you said you words are true and deep,

babe, i love you and all
but please give me an answer
cause i still care for you deeply
and i dont want this whole
relationship to end just because
of this problem we have,

if you truly love me
and your words are really true
you would tell whats wrong
and work it out,
but please dont break my heart...

red_angel*16
Member

since 2004-09-04

Posts 71

1 posted 2004-12-08 04:56 AM

this is almost the same thing i wrote earlier
but rewrote so tell me wat you think and what should i hane done .

THANK YOU !!!!!!!!!!!

*Alli4000*

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since 2004-03-21

Posts 3188
The World of Poetry

2 posted 2004-12-08 06:48 PM

"if you truly love me
and your words are really true
you would tell whats wrong
and work it out,
but please dont break my heart..."

Awww...depressing write. And I don't mean that badly...I mean that it's just full of emotion and pain and yea.

Keep Posting.

~Alli~

Happy Holidays!

red_angel*16
Member

since 2004-09-04

Posts 71

3 posted 2004-12-11 04:25 AM

Alli thanks for your reply's on my poem
and suggestions on it.
your the one who mostly reply's to my poems
so thanks again !!!

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