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WinterWren
Senior Member

since 2002-12-01

Posts 1044
...Coming to

0 posted 2004-10-16 02:27 PM

I just wanted to tell you
that I loved the way you smiled
(though I never really saw it)
I just wanted to tell you
that Im afraid of being alone.

And why can’t I heal these wounds?
(It’s too late to cry)
and why can’t I learn to forget?
(It’s too late to be strong)

Don’t let this winter weather fool you
(I swear Im warm)
don’t let this snow cloud your vision
(Im so good at pretending)
don’t believe me when I say,
“Im as beautiful as spring.”

Those tattered garments on the ground
are the not the remnants of my facade
yes, I still have my mask on
but isn’t it all that you wanted to see?

This blue tint to my lips
doesn’t mean Im cold
this frosted breath escaping
doesn’t mean...anything.

These iced-over tears that have fallen
are not the proof of vulnerability
yes, I still have my mask on
but doesn’t it smile like you want it to?

I smile ironically
as you tower over me
no, the ground isn’t hard
Im cushioned by the snow
(I swear Im warm)

You only think I ever let you in
(Im so good at pretending)
I look up and let the snow into my eyes
as you start to walk away
and I’ll whisper quietly,
“I wish I was as beautiful as spring.”

WinterWren-
Counting stars wishing I was ok,
Crashing down was my biggest mistake.

[This message has been edited by WinterWren (10-16-2004 08:45 PM).]

Lexy
Senior Member

since 2003-01-28

Posts 1038
California

1 posted 2004-10-18 07:31 PM

Don’t let this winter weather fool you
(I swear Im warm)

This blue tint to my lips
doesn’t mean Im cold

I love those parts the best.
The only ones that really stood out to me.
all the rest of the lines didn't hold much spark.

*Alli4000*

Member Elite

since 2004-03-21

Posts 3188
The World of Poetry

2 posted 2004-10-18 09:03 PM

"And why can’t I heal these wounds?
(It’s too late to cry)
and why can’t I learn to forget?
(It’s too late to be strong)"

I liked that part. Beautiful poem Stephanie..you have such a talent for writing.

~Alli~

*:.AIM = Alli4000.:*
Don’t cry because it’s over, smile because it happened...

peachesNcream
Senior Member

since 2001-08-21

Posts 513
Ocean Of Tears

3 posted 2004-10-19 08:52 PM

Great ending! You did a great job, as always. Your work impresses me more and more each time I read it! Another one for the library

~Jess

"When the power of love overcomes the love of power the world will know peace." -Jimi Hendrix

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

4 posted 2004-10-20 09:59 AM

Stephanie,

i love the interjections here
beautiful writing

HopelessRomanticGuy
Member

since 2001-08-17

Posts 495
LI, New York

5 posted 2004-10-30 03:06 AM

Just going over the poems I've missed from you, and this was the first I came across. (Hey, you once did it for me, and I've always enjoyed your work; the sheer intensity always gets to me.) Intense, as always. This poem was sad. I understand all about masks, and just how hard they are to get off. Heh, and you once said something about me being a good poet. Well, it's my turn to bow to you. *bows*

-Rich

Winamp is Playing:
"Another Brick In The Wall (Part I)"
Pink Floyd
The Wall

Part of knowing where I'm going
is knowing where I've been
~Rich~

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