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Teen Poetry #7

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Jaime

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0 posted 2003-11-01 04:56 PM

This is actually an old one, but I just found it and decided to post it.. even if only so that I don't lose it.

Just to warn you, you probably won't like it. But that's okay.

My time with you
unraveling, a coil
that releases
itself and pushes
to newer levels
of low

Gravity turns to
players and switches from
one kill to another
and I want you
to come and
break me

A blank canvas
waiting for the
creation, the link
in physical separation

Blue carries me and
this black I want to feel
long after you’re gone
Crossing my legs, I know
I know

I want to taste it
on the twists of my memory,
vividly, to contain
you here inside of me

And I want you
you come and
break me

Show me my fragility

the faeries creep into my hair at night leaving it in terrible knots

[This message has been edited by Jaime (11-01-2003 05:00 PM).]

dertah
Senior Member

since 2003-06-18

Posts 584

1 posted 2003-11-01 05:35 PM

good onnnnnneeeeeeeeeee

magic_612
Member

since 2003-07-31

Posts 190
NB, Canada

2 posted 2003-11-01 10:05 PM

I love this stanza

Blue carries me and
this black I want to feel
long after you’re gone
Crossing my legs, I know
I know

very creative!

Also, the last line is very catchy.. great work

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