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tapper798
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0 posted 2004-08-10 02:10 AM


I look at my reflection,
Surprised by what I see.
That a pretty girl was looking back,
That pretty girl was me!

My hips could be slimmer,
My arms could be more built
But this time I saw myself
Without seeing the guilt.

More times than not,
Girls hate their reflection,
Hate to see their failed attempts
When striving for perfection.

We pick and prod ourselves,
Wishing we could lose this or that,
Wishing that something was better or
That we could lose that fat.

I knew this as I stared at myself,
Those same blue eyes staring back,
And I realize that though I have imperfections,
I need to cut myself so slack.

Through my imperfections
Shines the beauty within me,
The me that people love,
The part that I had failed to see.

I learned so much from my reflections,
Still part of me wants to be perfect.
Through my imperfections I’m me,
No matter what the mirror reflects.

-Erin

let me know what you think guys! Let me know if there's anything I can do to improve!

Love is giving him the ability to break your heart...but trusting him enough to know he won't.

© Copyright 2004 Erin - All Rights Reserved
SCREAMIN
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1 posted 2004-08-10 02:53 AM


aww that was so friggin awesome!!
very self impowering!
i liked it muchly!

*Alli4000*
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2 posted 2004-08-12 10:45 AM


Hey Erin!

Ok, here's my favorite part:

"I learned so much from my reflections,
Still part of me wants to be perfect.
Through my imperfections I’m me,
No matter what the mirror reflects."

I thought that it really summed up the poem, and gave it a nice conclusion.
I really liked this poem...i'm gonna put it in my library!

~Alli~

I always knew looking back on the tears would make me laugh, but I never knew looking back on the laughter would make me cry.

*Belabebeautiful*
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3 posted 2004-08-13 02:51 PM


very good poem! Very insperational, More women need to see this side of themselves and understand that yes while things could be slimmer or better that we are all perfect the way we are. I just loved this poem! Grammer error though on the end of the 5th stanza I do believe you want that to me "some" instead of "so". Beautifully written piece.
~Live and Laugh~

Don't look to me for perfection for I will surely let you down.
~Bella~

dodge_chick2003
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4 posted 2004-08-13 03:17 PM


This poem is amazing, only if more people in the world could look at them self like this.
tapper798
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5 posted 2004-08-14 02:58 PM


thanks guys, it seems like no one replies to my poems anymore and I was happy to get a reply or two.  Yes it's supposed to be "some" not so in that staza. sorry bout that typO! thanks again guys

Love is giving him the ability to break your heart...but trusting him enough to know he won't.

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