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tapper798
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since 2003-07-20
Posts 353
My own world

0 posted 2004-07-01 11:21 PM


All my five sense,
Completely longing for you.
Almost to the point
Of actual tangibility.
I can see your face,
Nearly.
It’s almost as if
It’s etched in my mind,
Just so clear.
I can feel you,
Your shirt and your strong arms,
Nearly.
Almost as if
You were here.
I can smell your scent,
To me it’s only yours,
Nearly.
It’s almost as if
You had suddenly
Drifted near.
I can hear your voice,
So soft and sweet,
Comforting me,
Nearly.
Almost as if
You had sensed
My sudden fear.
I can almost taste your kiss,
Making me melt,
Nearly.
It’s almost as if
You knew how
To make my hear sear.
All of these,
So close and so wanted,
Yet
So far.

-Erin
This too is out of my normal writings so let me know what u think!

Love is giving him the ability to break your heart...but trusting him enough to know he won't.

© Copyright 2004 Erin - All Rights Reserved
sweet_cute_palestinian04
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since 2004-04-11
Posts 418
Earth
1 posted 2004-07-01 11:23 PM


cute!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

awesome!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

cant say more,,

Fate is what controls the world so just let it go and I PROMISE YOU WILL MAKE IT!!!

*Alli4000*
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since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188
The World of Poetry
2 posted 2004-07-02 12:52 PM


This is a different type of poem...never hardly see one in this kinda format.
But you did a great job, I love the way you were able to describe everything.  For example I like these lines:

"I can hear your voice,
So soft and sweet,
Comforting me"

Anyway, great job, keep it up!!!


~Alli~

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