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lilibeelee Member
since 2001-07-12
Posts 143 |
A broken fool An unmended mind A lonley heart A wasted soul I'm drifting Slipping away Held on for so long It's my time for farewell I've waited to long For something to change Just when I think it does It's not Just when I've pulled out I haven't Have things ever gotten better Or have they just gone worse Am I so doomed For my life to be such a curse I can't hold on to what's not even there I don't have someone to actauly care I can't go on This is killing me What's left but for me to be miserable Nothing to wait for But disapointment I would be lying to myself If I said things would get better Taunted by these thoughts Swarmed with fear Would they miss me Or just not at all I need to hold on to what I have But what if I have nothing? |
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Spine Grinder Senior Member
since 2000-10-28
Posts 1127Standing In Silence... |
I liked this, very descriptive, I'm prolly not wrong in saying most of us have felt this way once or twice before...It's a hard thing to shake off.....Well done and keep writing. It's been awhile,since I've seen the way, the candles light your face. It's been a while, but I can still remember just the way you taste! ~StainD |
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Lexy Senior Member
since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038California |
I know this feeling, and don't you hate when everyone is telling you that you don't have a right to be miserable. well voiced. I hear you. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Lisa~ Deeply emoted thoughts~ And yes, I too believe many of us have had these thoughts~ Things do eventually change ... sometimes, just when we think they will not~ *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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WinterWren Senior Member
since 2002-12-01
Posts 1044...Coming to |
Wow. This is so powerful. It almost brought tears to my eyes. I can relate to this so much. Excellent write, thanks for sharing. W.W. |
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tapper798 Member
since 2003-07-20
Posts 353My own world |
I liked this one, especially these lines: I need to hold on to what I have But what if I have nothing? I especially enjoyed the power of those lines. Good job. Love is giving him the ability to break your heart...but trusting him enough to know he won't. |
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Stepharoo Member
since 2004-05-04
Posts 149Washington, USA |
Wow, very well written. Yes I have felt that way too. Keep up the great work. *Tumbs Up* |
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fearing-laughter Senior Member
since 2001-04-24
Posts 605land of cheese (Wisconsin) |
indeed, everyone's felt this way. that doesn't mean undermining your pain is cool. i dunno though, life sucks sometimes, but other times it's beautiful. i for one amm willing to try to ignore the crap moments for the amazing ones. keep writing. feel better bergundy "Be who you want and do what you will, in the end those who matter won't mind, and those who mind won't matter." -Dr Suess- (a brilliant man) |
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