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Teen Poetry #7

too bright

Lexy
Senior Member

since 2003-01-28

Posts 1038
California

0 posted 2004-05-04 10:33 PM

ugly
and nothing can swing the mirror at an angle
to make me see differently.
spots on my skin are parralell to the sun spots on the inside.
the light is eating me,
the result of my careless daze of twirling flower stems, and drinking muddied water.
my smile shone too bright,
now my heart throbs, from the sunburn of my yellow nights.

sweet_cute_palestinian04
Member

since 2004-04-11

Posts 418
Earth

1 posted 2004-05-04 10:37 PM

cuteeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee..........................awesomee keep writting

Stepharoo
Member

since 2004-05-04

Posts 149
Washington, USA

2 posted 2004-05-04 10:37 PM

I had to read it a few times, but I think I got what you meant.
I really liked this,
keep it up!

C?
Member

since 2001-12-29

Posts 190

3 posted 2004-05-05 01:59 AM

yea, we have similar styles. you spelt parallel wrong :P.

The last line is one of the best I've read in a LONG time. yeyaeyaeyaeyaeyaeyaeay.
Collen

*Alli4000*

Member Elite

since 2004-03-21

Posts 3188
The World of Poetry

4 posted 2004-05-05 06:51 PM

Wow!!! I loved this poem....even though it was kinda short. It perfectly describes the way I'm feeling right now.

~Alli~

blackandwhitehorizon
Member

since 2003-05-05

Posts 183
an akward state of mind

5 posted 2004-05-05 08:17 PM

I like this a lot!

"love is but a song we sing and fear's the way we die"

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