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dont beg........
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dont beg........ |
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sweet_cute_palestinian04 Member
since 2004-04-11
Posts 418Earth |
dont beg me for love , you know i wont ever denay.. dont ask me for love, you know i cant see it going through my eyes dont ask me for love, you know i wll be rejected to fly. dont ask me to love you know i will never say goodbye.. but do ask me not to love , because my answer will be your dreaming "honey" |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
I did not like the way you organized this poem. The rhyming sounded way forced and to me it kinda sounded like you were changing the meaning of the poem just so it would rhyme. I think you should stick with your normal syle of poems. I always love those and when you don't rhyme your poems I think that you get your emotions through alot clearer. Take my advice if you want but if you don't that's okay. I probably don't even know what I'm talking about anyways. Keep writing, and I'll keep reading.... ~Alli~ |
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sweet_cute_palestinian04 Member
since 2004-04-11
Posts 418Earth |
lolol...sis thanks i really appreciate.....welll i will try your advice and im soo glad you you enjoy my poem just keep writting plzz ur poems are gr88 even mooreeeeeeee...soo thank again and have a gr88 day.. |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
awwww....thanks. I hope that you have a great day 2. I didn't want to sound mean, I really liked this poem, but I just think I like your other style better. LOL, now I'm repeating what I just said 5min. ago......  Anyways, thanks for the comment on my poem... I appreciate it alot. Thanks, ~Alli~ |
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