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If Cars Where Guys
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If Cars Where Guys |
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River Senior Member
since 2003-09-16
Posts 627my own little world |
If cars where guys all the Camaros would sit in showcases without motors and all the average bananas would run around and go places 'till the miles cam and ran out I wouldn't doubt the Camaro got rusty and forgotten but old blue had a funeral even a coffin I know you want to look hot but your mind is all that matters don't become a big shot I hate that more often than not I want you to see there is so much more so much more that you could be If you just settle for what's inside than for contemporary looks in a temporary life Amazing Grace how sweet the sound that opened my eyes to all the lies we fool ourselves to believe wake up listen and learn you could be surprised my best bud is not the best bod but it doesn't matter in the end we're all fatter a friendship is what matters looks are curses friends are like kisses and that's all I gotta say about it. sleep my precious slumber [This message has been edited by River (04-10-2004 10:15 PM).] |
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xno4everx Junior Member
since 2004-04-08
Posts 14NY |
honestly?...i dont get it //..Two souls with but a single thought, two hearts that beat as one..\\ |
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kissa~rachelle Senior Member
since 2003-11-27
Posts 988nowhere special |
honestly? ,,, I love it!!! ~lol~ Very awesome. I want a relationship i can finally sink my teeth into.~ Alexander Sterling |
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Ixxi Member
since 2004-01-02
Posts 77England |
Casual, yet very sophisticated. You have a lot of good stuff to say. The only bad thing I have to say is that the spelling leaves a lot to be desired here... [This message has been edited by Ixxi (04-10-2004 05:49 PM).] |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
Very creative! |
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blueyedlioness Member
since 2003-04-24
Posts 289USA |
Adorable... like you sat down and scribbled a few thoughts and it ended up like this. I really like it when someone is this casual and comfortable with writing. |
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WinterWren Senior Member
since 2002-12-01
Posts 1044...Coming to |
I really love this. Way too many people are too concerned with looks, when that to me, is what matters the least. Personality IS always more remembered. W.W. |
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River Senior Member
since 2003-09-16
Posts 627my own little world |
thanx everyone...xno4everx - if you still want an explanation, e-mail me and i can get into some better details, mostly i was just using metaphores at the beggining though. Ixxi - I'm sorry, lol, i forget to run these through a spell checker every now and then...Rachelle, Alli, Blue, and Winter, I'm glad you liked this also, I know that a lot of people would agree with this and the remainder probably needs to hear it because of what the Media is always telling us - Subtly or not. anyways, catch you all later, - River sleep my precious slumber |
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wishing on a star Junior Member
since 2003-12-03
Posts 19sleeping in my warm bed =) |
i liked what i understood of it...hah...im a blonde i guess...nice job!! young naive & vulnerable to the world |
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Deep_Inside Member
since 2002-02-14
Posts 377i can't stop hiding |
Vary creative but it lacked structure it was everywhere and I had a hard time putting the whole picture together but other than that I like the theme and the content good poem...keep writing when you live you begin to die |
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River Senior Member
since 2003-09-16
Posts 627my own little world |
wishing on a star - It's my fault, don't worry about it, lol. thank you for reading...Deep_Inside I agree...this was a lot of attempt at sorting out some jumbled thoughts...didn't turn out perfect, but thanks for reading also =) - River sleep my precious slumber |
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