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Preach to me |
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Sweetest Sorrow X Member
since 2004-01-19
Posts 146From a cradle to a casket 
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I sit in my basement, and listen to you preach about the only way to succede You've built a corperation that steals millions of lives We won't take it any more we're sick of your lies I thought I'd see a change over time. Why do you hate us? What was our crime? I'm sick of sitting around I'm sick of being patient We'll take our country back if it takes a revolution The few, the proud the fat cats your our countries curse Throw your weight around and make everything worse We carry the rich we've forgotten then poor Politics is a disease and there's no cure Don't you think that life's to short to sit around and think about how we can turn our lives around? I can't say there won't be any pain but is it worth staying the same? |
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Snickers123 Member
since 2004-05-07
Posts 94United States-Iowa |
nice job, keep writing. ~*.:Leah:.*~ |
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young_blood Senior Member
since 2003-09-19
Posts 1115Indianapolis, IN |
good use of more subtle rhyming, i'm not too into political poetry, most of it sucks. this one was ok though. i dont know, it's all been said before though. |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
I agree with young_blood, you did a good job with the rhyming. I don't think that this was your best work, but I did enjoy it, and that's what counts. KEEP ON SHARING!  ~Alli~ |
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