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Lexy Senior Member
since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038California |
straight shot. we cry out to god or memory to wrap us in majesty. I remember a specific time, when breathing was the last thing on anyones mind. the focus was on the matinence of our blueness. some have called it carelessness. take a confident shot into the black air, my heart is swollen and wet, so your bound the strike me. Its july, and I'm freezing, stayed in bed all day just trying to warm myself to the idea. the primary concern is unattainable now. you insert your icecubes into my mouth with your skilled and knowing tonuge. I'm spoon-fed the same medicine daily. they stroke my skin, like its a new experience, and I need reassurance. my eyes are a bland shade of yellow, a glazed and heavy look into the mirror. straight shot to the absolute center. [This message has been edited by Lexy (07-09-2004 10:03 PM).] |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I remember your name and always try to check out your work. There is always something electric to find--like this: "Its july, and I'm freezing, stayed in bed all day just trying to warm myself to the idea. the primary concern is unattainable now. you insert your icecubes into my mouth with your skilled and knowing tonuge. I'm spoon-fed the same medicine daily." whoa. Most impressive, Lexy. I AM a fan.  |
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Xeonox
since 2000-04-01
Posts 1764CA, USA |
This is a good writing. I am left to be confused. |
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Hollow_Emptiness Senior Member
since 2004-02-01
Posts 715New Zealand |
I agree with serenity.......GREAT piece! Hollow. |
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Tomer Senior Member
since 2002-06-28
Posts 1168Michigan |
Lex= I had to read it over again. I really like it a lot...whenver I see your writings, I am impressed. Well done. Tomer |
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PainBaneChaos Member
since 2003-10-17
Posts 150The point of no return |
I have to go with everyone else, I think. I really liked it. It's one of those that you have to read over again, isn't it? Anyway. I think it's awesome. |
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brezee Member
since 2003-06-02
Posts 140 |
wow...it's definitely interesting...in a good way, of course...i liked it a lot...i love the poems with contrasting things such as "it's july and I'm freezing..." again, i thought it was a great piece...although some of it is confusing to me, all around great job! ~*brezee*~ |
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