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Lexy
Senior Member

since 2003-01-28

Posts 1038
California

0 posted 2004-03-12 04:56 PM

Everything is insisting upon being pink.
Spring fever...
My eyes are twiching behind their lids.
Truth is eating through my lies like acid.
My bruises were so easy to conceal in the winter months.
Under my little grey cloud.
But now, now I closed my eyes as I looked your way.
And my heart fell clumsily out of place.
Everything is overly bright.
Your gentle fingers brushed my ribs, as you put my words back in check
my heart back to sleep.
This is the same ritual we have grown to know too well.
Time and time again.
And the numbers on the clock are so tired of the montony.
A wearing red glow, and we all know.
Its a biting honesty.

kissa~rachelle
Senior Member

since 2003-11-27

Posts 988
nowhere special

1 posted 2004-03-12 05:14 PM

Wow. This poem was beautiful. The imagery was awesome. I loved it! I'm savin this, if its okay with you anyways!

~Vapire Kisses

I want a relationship i can finally sink my teeth into.~ Alexander Sterling

Hollow_Emptiness
Senior Member

since 2004-02-01

Posts 715
New Zealand

2 posted 2004-03-12 06:07 PM

I really really really liked this! i've added it to my library because i really thought it was awesome and so descriptive.

I liked the last three lines the best.

"Why are my visions so unliving with dreams? And why do I no longer care?" - Stygian

River
Senior Member

since 2003-09-16

Posts 627
my own little world

3 posted 2004-03-12 11:25 PM

hey Chica, this was groovy! the imagery in this is ...whispery and dreamy, i really like that. good job =) catcha later,

- River

sleep my precious slumber

eor
Senior Member

since 2002-09-26

Posts 959
blues & greys

4 posted 2004-03-13 03:54 AM

this one was interesting to me, i dont know if i am supposed to feel sad because it seems there is a lot of hurt in here or happy because you are comming out about the pain you have suffered and sharing it with the world, anyways nice write

"So what befalls the flawless?
Look what I've built, it shines so beautifully now watch as it destroys me."

click1
Member

since 2003-03-25

Posts 152
usa

5 posted 2004-03-13 06:27 PM

Ugh! like a stone,a hard stone, in my stomach!
I felt the power in this one! Good job!!
And what Eor said...sad words and courage all at once. Thank you.

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