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Eromyna
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since 2002-11-29
Posts 306
Pheonix, AZ, USA

0 posted 2004-02-06 10:43 AM


Intricate anomaly
Lay me down to sleep
Love and hate for company
Underneath the sheets

Slide into my skin again
Into my soul and heart
Open up my bloody eyes
Naked, in the dark

Positive, you optimist
Lull me into trust
Aggravate my bitterness
Your yesterdays are dust

Today, like all before it
Here I am, and I move not
Incapacitated critic
Nothing good grows from this rot
Gnawing endlessly at optimism
Snarling, at what, I forgot

"I don't need to scream for you to deem me aggravation."

© Copyright 2004 Shay D. - All Rights Reserved
Jelfling
Junior Member
since 2004-01-27
Posts 21
Indiana
1 posted 2004-02-06 11:41 AM


I loved this, it's not just rhyming it's got a rhythm to it and it sticks in your head.
eor
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since 2002-09-26
Posts 959
blues & greys
2 posted 2004-02-07 02:28 AM


loved the melopoeia of this poem

"So what befalls the flawless?
Look what I've built, it shines so beautifully now watch as it destroys me."

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