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Starsfalling Member
since 2003-03-18
Posts 94some where deep in the shadows |
name came from yoga meditation...where i first got my inspiration for this One moment upon the beach Looking deep within blue eyes No words needed Here upon this stormy beach We stroll hand within hand Together in eternal happiness Slight breezes play with your hair A smile upon my face Knowing your pure beauty Reality snaps back Return from our fantasy realm Knowing it will soon return -lance There is no peace among the stars, only an eternity of carnage and slaughter and the laughter of thirsting gods |
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Xonicx Junior Member
since 2004-01-14
Posts 20Vancouver, WA |
Nice poem, how's it dark though? -------------------------------- |
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Starsfalling Member
since 2003-03-18
Posts 94some where deep in the shadows |
lol its not... i forgot to put it in another catagory this is the only one i ever come too There is no peace among the stars, only an eternity of carnage and slaughter and the laughter of thirsting gods |
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LiquidMidnight Member
since 2003-09-24
Posts 50 |
Good poem. The advice I would give you though, is it might not be the best idea to end two lines that are so close together, with the same word. (Beach) Other than that, I enjoyed this poem very much. (and was also wondering why it didn't seem so "dark". LOL) |
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Starsfalling Member
since 2003-03-18
Posts 94some where deep in the shadows |
ahhh i missed that...i try not to put the same word together like that yeah i know...lol this should be else where thanks |
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